Hot damn that looks cool.

Pic related.

This board is going to be huge. The topic I'm posting in doesn't matter.

>>1026
What even is that

>>1029
See the subject of this thread.

Woah, nice logo. Is that made-for-the-fic or borrowed-for-the-fic?

>>1044

I snagged it from a metal website. The only thing I've ever made---uh, modified---for the story is >>222 .

>>1022
I think you should introduce Psychic humans into this story, I believe you've mentioned Sabrina's "close" relationship(not confirmed) with her Alakazam. This could be a wonderful way to interpret your views of the psychic trainer template from the games.

It was Mewtwo, actually. I was planning to expand on that in a side story, but...eh.

As far as psychic Trainers, it wouldn't really serve any purpose. There are more than enough Psychic-types; any more ESP and people will get tired of it.

>>1053
Is you for serious? I thought it was her Kadabra/Alakazam. I had to include Mewtwo after experiencing the awesome that is his character.

>>1035
See the subject of my ass. I didn't get that picture for entirely too long. Think me brain is finally fried.

>>1054
And this from somebody writing PokeSci-Fi. I am disappointed.

>>1056
Is that a statistics thing? If it is, I didn't get it cause I was too busy doing real math o_o

>>1057
FIZZIKS, MAN! FIZZIKS!

Shall we settle this debate about the pictorial? It's a free body diagram used to illustrate the forces acting upon a free body. At the moment, the forces are acting on the body in such a way that they are cancelling each other out; i.e., they are in equilibrium.

>>1026

lol Physics

>>1053
Hmm, you have a good point.

Love the logo for the first post, Skyler.
I can't help but see it spelled as Equilibrium3 because of how it's set up, though.

That, or I'm just exhausted.

Right, well, that's quite enough about the thread picture. Does anyone have any questions about the story, or the larger world in which it takes place?

BTW: Still working on the final draft of Chapter 39. It's hard getting the emotions just right.

>>1089

Not beyond my obligatory "moar" :P

A snippet, just to show that I am actually doing something:

He went to his backpack, pulled out a fresh set of clothes, and disappeared into the bathroom. As the shower began to run, Sarah occupied herself with a book from her Trainer’s bag. By the time the water cut off she was only staring at the words on the page, instead waiting for the bathroom door to open. Storm finally emerged, drying his hair, while Gardevoir pretended to only give him a cursory glance. He looked at the book in her hands and threw the towel into the bathroom, going to the chair she was sitting in and ruffling her hair.

“Oh, that’s a good one.”

‘I don’t even know what it’s about. I don’t think it’s very good.’

“But it’s a classic! It’s about a mad sea captain hunting a white Wailord.”

‘Sound like something you would enjoy more than me.’

Keep it up, and you'll have an entire chapter available via snippet form.

>>1102
The scene seconds before Storm tears off Gardevoir's dress and gets his freak on.

Why would he do that after his shower?

And where ever did you get the idea that they are a pair?

>>1113

lol.

>>1115

Don't be stupid. You know exactly where we got the idea from.

I have absolutely no idea what you're talking about. Show me any part of Equilibrium that suggests that.

>>1116
>>1102
>Refereed to as "Sarah" here and in the last chapter.

And here I thought we were done with this pseudo-secret.

He owns a Gardevoir. Of course he's fucking it.

>>1117

Oh Skyler, your intentionally naive statements bring naught but tranquility to the vast nothingness within the cockles of my heart.

Not that any of you are supposed to know this, but---come a little closer. A little more. Storm is actually Jack Harris.

Bwaa ha ha

>>1117
So we're still pretending that Storm isn't a prequel to EQ are we? I really thought that was over once the name "Sarah" was mentioned at all. What, do we have to hear him called "Jack" to finally make the connection official?

>>1123

Apparently we're too slow in the head to already know.

>>1122

AH MAH GAHD SHPOILARZ

Aw, we done killed any modicum of suspense we still had. I'll have to pull out the tragic aces up my sleeve to restore it.

Please do not entertain the idea that I did anything but photoshop these images.

>>1127
>Darkrai not the Ace of Spades, a symbol synonymous with death.

I guess Arceus works too. He likes to kill people too.

I imagine clubbing someone to death is just as effective as spading them.

Arceus was my choice for the highest ace because he is the ultimate trump. Now, if we have Arceus as the ace, what would the other face cards be? (Other aces depicted here included)

>>1130
Ace of Diamonds: Giratina
King of Diamonds: Dialga
Queen of Diamonds: Palkia
Jack of Diamonds: Celebi

Ace of Hearts: Rayquaza
King of Hearts: Groudon
Queen of Hearts: Kyogre
Jack of Hearts: Jirachi

Ace of Clubs: Darkrai
King of Clubs: Regigigas
Queen of Clubs: Heatran
Jack of Clubs: Cresselia

Ace of Spades: Arceus
King of Spades: Mewtwo
Queen of Spades: Deoxys
Jack of Spades: Mew

Joker: Miltank

Don't kid yourself Skyly, you did everything but photoshop those cards.

I know you didn't just try to give me a pet name. I'll cut you.

Well, forgetting the cards metaphor for a moment, here's something I was hoping to get feedback on. (Mild spoilers) At the end of Act IX, one of the main characters goes to the Hall of Origin after satisfying all the conditions of that legend no one remembers. Immediately before this, Darkrai heads there to stop it, telling our narrator that they are the last line of defense against what he believes will happen. After the "So concludes Act IX...to be continued", I want to put the lyrics to Heaven Shall Burn's "Endzeit". Do you think these lyrics might adequately capture the mood? Imagine a building coming down around the main characters as this occurs, if that helps

Nothing, just nothing, nothing will wipe this heart out
And no one, just no one, no one will break this frontline
We are, we are, we are the final ones
We are, we are the, we are the final resistance

We're fighting to the last
Driven by your hate
Awoken us
No one will surrender
A storm will break the silence
This storm will break the silence

Nothing, just nothing, nothing will wipe this heart out
We are, we are the, we are the final resistance

This vengeance is justice
And justice will be done
your end is our triumph
And the day will come
A reign of terror, a life of horror
Nothing will remain
A promise to the fallen
We make them feel our pain
A promise to the felons
You'll never rise again

We take it back
We take it all back
We take it back
We take it all back


This vengeance is justice
And justice will be done
Your hate has so betrayed us
Everyday we come
A promise to the fallen
We make them feel our pain
A promise to the felons
You'll never rise again


Nothing, just nothing, nothing will wipe this heart out
And no one, just no one, no one will break this frontline
We are, we are, we are the final ones
We are, we are the, we are the final resistance

You'll get a pet name and you'll LIKE IT.

Okay 151channers, let's play a little game. I'll throw out an element of Equilibrium--a character, action, chapter--and the first one to give me the symbolism of it gets a spoiler or something of equal value. Ready?

ROUND 1: Let's start with something easy. What does Jason represent/symbolize?

>>1141
Jason represents an intelligent bowl of jell-o. He symbolizes the desire for sweet, wobbly, and colorful deserts in all of us.

That didn't take long.

Jason represents a few different things. First and foremost, he's the hero with a thousand faces. He's followed the heroic pattern for the most part, and that wasn't an accident. Second, he represents the redemption of a world teetering on the brink of disaster; the name Jason means "to heal." Third, he is Mira's complement; the yang to her yin. They play off one another and without her around, he's kind of aimless.

Everything exists in balance. Jason and Mira, Eric and Xavier, Ivan and Victor, Storm and S--ahem, Gardevoir--Darkrai and Cresselia, you get the idea. Anything without balance moves towards a state of balance (Richard and his laything), and when any of these equilibriums are disturbed, shit goes down. Questions?

/head-up-own-ass-explanation

>>1145
Yep...definitely jell-o.

>>1145
I saw a parallel with general humanity.

He was very adamant about his stance on Pokemon/Human intimacy, but with enough outside stimuli, humans break down and compromise.
>See Chapter 38, Blaziken sub section.

pic unrelated, but makes me smile.

Buh

Here you go

http://anime.adultfanfiction.net/story.php?no=600048047&chapter=13

>>1150
D: Goddammit. I- dammit all. That was just depressing.

>>1149
Off topic: Sweet, yellowtext.
>we can now imply implications with color

So...any questions?

>>1155
What's the answer to life, the universe, and everything?

>>1155
Was my assumption of Jason as much of a shot in the dark as I think it is? I get the whole Yin-Yang deal, but you said he's a few different things.

I was expecting questions more along the lines of "why are you such a monster" and "how much did you get when you sold your heart," but alright.

>>1156

The "everything" we know is like a long line to get into a club. The purpose of life is to get to the front of the line and past the bouncer.

>>1157

Symbolism is what you make of it. Our interpretations differ, and while I don't really see the humanity microcosm in him, if that's what he means to you, so be it.

>>1158
I can do that too.

SPOILERS DAMMIT
Goddammit, why'd you kill Furret....sick bastard...
END OF SPOILERS DAMMIT

>>1159

I'll tell you if you can answer me this: who are the three evil characters (Lords excluded, recently deceased characters included) in the story?

>>1160
Richard, Zangoose, but the third escapes me.

Xavier, sure, but i have my doubts. MagmaZombie Houndoom was just doing his duty. Eric was cannon fodder. And you excluded lords, so there goes the Alpha.

You win this round.

Richard and Zangoose, certainly.

But what about Storm?

Oh, I know what you're saying. "But he's a protagonist." True enough, but he's in the red karma-wise. He killed the Fire Gem's Guardian, murdered dozens of people in Iceclave City, kidnapped a kid, let a large group of people walk off to their deaths, stood idly by while a group of Registeel massacred a pack of Absol, ordered the executions of two people (and killed a third himself), sent a dazed Trainer running over a mountain range with no supplies, and brought down a volcano. Are these the marks of a hero?

>>1163
Dear god you certainly love to fuck with our heads.

>>1163
I had a feeling you'd pull that card.

Sure, I thought of Storm Jack Harris. While he's not an ideal hero, he's not evil in my book. He looks to me like a trainer who's had the world turned against him a few too many times and just doesn't give a fuck. So he just does what he feels will put dent back into what hit him.

Well, I've rattled off the list of bad things he's done; what are some of the good things he's done?

>>1166
Bought Jason a Psy ball...that's something...

>>1166
But even if it was just his predisposition to do those sort of things from day one, he didn't exactly choose to put himself in all those situations. Most of the time, from the very beginning, it seems as if he's been thrust into having to make those choices, and he goes with what he feels is right. That's not him being evil nearly so much as it is the Alpha playing him like a harp and fucking with his entire life to orchestrate its own release.

>>1168

You're not that far off, but at the risk of spoiling the very last thing in the story I'll say no more.

>>1163
Thank Christ you're not playing him as a good guy. Sometimes it feels like Obi-Wan Kestormy doesn't get enough karmic punishment. So we know he's done lots of bad things - killed some pricks, tampered with holy artefacts, offended the Lords by boning his pet, etc. His evil was all self-serving, but maybe his good is too. The good he's done by fighting Arceus could be entirely self-motivated - maybe he's just lashing out at the universe (equilibrium) in general for not letting his fuckery go unpunished.

I'm starting to wonder if it will even be worth my while in reading Equilibrium. From what I see here it's going the way of Colossus: The Forbidden Project, or I Have No Mouth an I Must Scream. Which is the way of darkness and depression, and though that direction is all well and good, its something I have a bit of trouble reading as I am not one to get too involved with overly depressing stories. LIfe isn't ever that mean to you, at east in my opinion. There is always some kind of silver lining right? All I've been hearing from this thread is "such and such dies," "such and such gets killed," and other things of negative orientation.

I understand that life can treat a person especially bad, and all the tables can be turned against someone for all the wrong reasons. In a way I'm going to be guilty of this myself, and I should start rolling the dice of destiny to see who will bite the bullet and disappear into the void, never to be heard from again. Character death is something that will be hard for me, especially since I don't have that many OCs and so far I like them all to much to kill them. I understand that I can silence some of the game characters (gym leaders and the like), but I find them too bad ass to kill off.

I do want to be a puppet master like Skyler here, but I also don't want to be an overly sadistic and depressing one. I guess I could blame it on the fact that going into Sin and Punishment, I was of the mindset that I didn't want people dying or watching their friends get pounded into the earth by a Registeel.

Maybe to make sure I don't end up with the "goody two shoes" syndrome I should hold a vote to see who thinks what character should be terminated. I know that may not be the best way, but it's a way non the less. Only thing is Clause and his unnamed pairing need to remain alive until the near end of my story for the "final boss" fight.

I also would like some more OCs but have a limited creative capacity for making influential character, especially with the way my story works. Spoilers: My story is loosely based off the platinum story line of the game. Major events can be guessed pretty much with 100% accuracy as to where my characters will be going next and what they will be doing there. Its how I carry them out and how different my story actually is that makes it interesting and fun to read (I hope). So yes, after chapter 4, Clause and his unnamed companion character will be heading to floaroma and the Valley Windworks to deal with Mars and the Team Galactic presence there. That is the event, but what I do within it is what you can't predict. Then in Chapter 6 its time for Eterna Forest, Eterna City, the Eterna Galactic building, and so on. So have fun trying to predict what I'm going to do, cause you won't exactly be right, except in terms of location.

Anyway, that's my rant for today.

>>1173

Look. While I do agree with you to some degree, sometimes a character should die, especially when they're doing something extremely stupid. They piss off that Registeel, chances are they wont exactly escape unscathed by that ancient weapon of war. If you're really torn between letting a character live or die, leave it up to chance: roll a die. Some would say that's bad writing, but it's certainly much better than "loving your characters too much".

>>1175
Unless by loving you mean fucking over.

Look. You're not going to have a big smile on your face through the whole story, that's a given, and if you did, I'd recommend you seek help. I can no longer count the number of unnamed characters that have died in the course of the story, but they all serve to advance the plot. Named characters? 8. Eight characters, of a named cast of at least 25 (not including any Pokemon but Zangoose), have died. This is a massive sweeping story; ask anyone who's read it. Death is inevitable. I don't go striking people with the five-sided Fist of God at random, that would be pointless.

You don't like reading death scenes. I can understand that. That's why there's only one point where someone cradles a bleeder (insensitive) in their arms and they have time to say something, and I have yet to write that. It's supposed to be a sad scene, but a lot of Equilibrium can be read almost as a social comedy (at one of the protagonists' expense), or a bildungsroman for the main characters. If it made you want to blow your brains out, it wouldn't vaguely cross over with "Northern Star" or have "The Dark Type" set in the same continuity. I think if you give it a chance, like the chance I gave Sin and Punishment (wary as I was of it containing "Sin" in the name), you'll enjoy it, if for nothing else than some writing tips you can pick up from it.

Pic related: I want this inscription at the base of the Sky Pillar.

>>1179
Don't worry Skyler, I will give it a chance, I'm just getting through it really slowly...and I mean really slowly. I want to focus on my own work and get it done and out so I can get back to where I was before the re-haul. I don't want to turn this into a slinging contest so I'll just say that my current placement is at the beginning of chapter 3 and I will read. You forget that I was once a critic and reviewer for 2 1/2 years of FF.net. When I find something good I stick with it. Equilibrium is good, I like it, its just that as the topic of my post suggests, I was assuming things based on the responses you've received, and the hints of story to come that pop up on your thread.

I will read, but first I want to get my stuff done. Speaking of giving my story a chance, you never did tell me what you thought of chapter 3. If you feel like giving me some feedback, stop by my story's thread or leave a review if you can. I like your criticisms as they show me what i need to fix. Catch you later.

So I'm going to assume I put that Moby-Dick reference in the last chapter for nothing.

>>1185
I got it...

So did I.

>>1179
Fuck yeah Ozymandias.

>>1185
Never make references to shitty works in good ones.

>>1193

FREE SPEECH! MANIFEST DESTINY!

=====

Skyler, everyone fucking got it. Just because no one mentioned it doesn't mean no one knows what you're referencing. Chill out, son.

I was going to have their boat to Sootopolisattacked by a white Wailord, but then I remembered that I would have to write that. So many good ideas die in my head because I can't make the story any longer than it's already going to be.

'Cause your publisher and editor are so going to cut things out.

>>1203

Because they have so many other things on their plate, obviously.

I can't say I've had much but a smile on my face while reading this.

That's not to say that I don't have emotional attachment to characters, or that I'm a deranged fuck (debatable). I certainly mourn character deaths due to the fact that it means the character won't be written any further, but I believe a good death is a better end to a character than a vague happily-ever-after.

Huge emphasis on "good death". No named characters have died, in my opinion, cheaply or prematurely yet.

>>1193

Moby-Dick is shitty wut

It is the manliest novel ever written; everything else pales in comparison. Never insult it again unless you want to be tracked down and have it read to you forcibly.

It's not that my publishers and editors, haha, wouldn't allow it, it's that I don't think I can divert the story any more than I already have.

And for the record, I don't use editors. Just not my style.

Oh, people will die. I have a few good deaths planned...pic related.

You know, that scene back in the Lacuna is the sort of reaction that I was expecting, so I'm glad you were able to show that there was some kind of impact on them. I was actually touched by the way Regirock responded. Who'd have thought you could turn a stolid golem into an emotional character?

Just a side note from an anon have you noticed that only the normal types of the main cast are dying.

>>1210

Found the third evil character.

>>1210

Normal types are my favorite too.
His discrimination disgusts me.

>>1211
Spoiler that picture dammit!

>>1216
I talked to Rossco about that actually, he said he didn't know how to implement spoiler images...

ON TOPIC: Is Jason going to have time to flesh his team back out before the Raid on Rayquaza? Though i doubt he'd be so willing to go and put some greenhorns out on some dangerous mission like this.

You don't like me bumping off-Normal types? It's supposed to be symbolic of the norm of this old world not surviving into the new one, but whatever.

Giratina's not evil. He's the narrator. Even if he were to be objectively evil, he would spin his actions in such a way that they seem right, or at least necessary.

Oh, here's story-Skyler's team again. Feedback on their nicknames?

--Flygon (“Ays”)
--Tyranitar (“Sovereign”)
--Houndoom (“Vulcan”)
--Spiritomb (“Legion”)
--Scizor (“Alsvid”)
--Alakazam (“Rahab”)

>>1219
thatsthejoke.jpg

Anyway, pretty cool nicknames for that team .which has 3 Dark Types. nice to see that bias wasn't present back then.

Sovereign- Epic, like Tyranitar
Vulcan- Fitting for a Fire Type
Legion- I see what you did there
Ays- Short, and cool
Rahab- Seems like a mustachioed type name
Alsvid-Sounds fierce, quick, and piercing.

>>1219

Obviously not too fond of sarcastic humor.

My team:
Alakazam: "Rehab"
Mr. Mime: "Dr. Rockso" (he does cocaine)
Gardevoir: "Claire" (she's clairvoyant [yes, she])
Gengar: "Kool-Aid" (bursts through walls and doesn't afraid of anything)
Kakuna: "Woody" (let's bang them together and see who's is harder)
Clefable: "HM Slave" (holy shit a use for my moonstone)

Vulcan is a pretty common name, especially for fire types. I think you can get away with it.

>>1219
Would you mind changing the name of the Houndoom? If not that's okay, I just happen to have a fire type that will appear in Silver Wings that I was going to name Vulcan...I feel torn as to whether I still should considering you are using it now.

How about you name it Aries or Mars instead, as those are the names of the greek/roman god of war, and houndoom are seen as the dogs of war in the lucario movie.

I want to try and be different with my names from other authors if I can (imagine how cheated I felt when I saw the Pokethelon founder old dude was named Magnus). If you can stand having two fire types in the same fanfic site named Vulcan, I would like to keep mine named that.

I really don't want to change the name as it kinda stuck and I got used to it being the name over the course of a month or so. Just let me know what would be a good course of action.

>>1224
sorry bout deleting my post, I felt I was getting too emotional. I want to try and stay as respectful I can. Hence the new one with less unfriendliness.

...

Okay, fine I get it, stop making us look like psychotic schizophrenics. I'll really try harder in future to stop doing that.

We will take this option into consideration. Codicil: A satisfactory substitution must be provided. "Ares" and "Mars" are not satisfactory.

Anyone care to venture a guess as to >>1208 and what kind of death it entails?

>>1229
Ion cannon attack on the enemy's command center followed by a zerg rush.

If it's self-destructive vengeance and caricatures of different facets of humanity you want in your literature, The Count of Monte Cristo has plenty of that. The difference is that stuff actually happens in Monte Cristo, 100% of it exciting and manly and awesome.

Err, close. Kinetic bombardment.

>>1231
I knew that the second I saw the rod going down.

Gives a whole new meaning to "rain death upon our enemies."

Chapter 40's coming along. The surviving members of Jason's team are having their own private conversations. The one between Lucario and Blaziken is particularly interesting.

>>1244
Awkwardness ensues.

You'd be surprised.

>>1225

I found a better name for the Houndoom: Cerberus. I'll just have to give it three tails.

>>1250
And I was really hoping you wouldn't call it that. That would be a name I would lump in with Mars and Ares.