Second pic, yay.

News: Don't expect an update to either of these stories for a bit, this week is hell and I have a lot of outside life monotony to attend to. Namely two comparative art essays, an English essay, an accounting project, and also accounting homework. Basically...a shitstorm of work.

I'll be working on SaP Ch 4 slowly and then Ch 3 of SW if possible. I might just splurge on SaP if I can find the time to really just sit and write.

Doesn't help that a bowler hat is the least intimidating hat ever.

>>1065


Yeah it almost had me in hysterics

>>1066
Tell that to Odd-Job. And besides, the salesman is supposed to seem non-threatening. If you laugh and are relaxed, it's easier to con you.

And for the record, I think bowler hats are awesome.

I just realized we got our own section.
Love the Lugia picture, by the way.

I may not be writing for a while as there is something in my life causing a major psychological dilemma that needs to be addressed. I've started feeling threatened just recently, and I'm feeling cornered becuase of the situation and events surrounding the reasons behind why I feel this way.

I am angry, and hurt because of what's been happening lately between me and someone who I felt was a friend. I can't say what is going on as that is a private affair, and name calling has never done anyone any good at all.

Don't expect anything to be done on either of my stories until I can figure out how to get things dealt with, which involves me having a serious talk with the party involved.

>>1083
Problem solved methinks...now back to writing.

>>1088

Yeah, sorry about all that. :S

There are times when I come up with ideas that someone should write. I post them most often on my profile. However no one ever looks at those. So now that I'm on a forum, prepare for me to post these little ideas for you're viewing pleasure as well as the possibility that you may actually take up the challenges I post. So, without further ado, my first writers challenge for all of you on this thread.
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Writers Challenge #1 (4/11/10): was listening to some western movie music, Ennio Morricone specifically. The Musician behind the music of spaghetti westerns that are probably considered classics (Fist full of dollars, Few dollars more, The good The Bad and The Ugly, Once upon a time in the west, and probably more).

This crazy idea popped into my head while listening to it so I figured I'd post a challenge and see if someone would do it for the lulz. It can be a One Shot or a full on Story, but it should be complete non the less.

Make a Pokemon fic, that is also a spaghetti western. Get that sense of grittiness and grunge that is always seen with things of this nature. All the stereotypes; the nameless hero who's a "bad" man but has a heart of gold, all the other good stuff.

The challenge here is not to make a satire, but to seriously write it and bring out both the elements of Pokemon and the spaghetti western. This may not be possible, but the image of a guy, in a big hat, with a poncho, and an unnamed pokemon, walking silently into a western themed town, looked extremely cool in my mind.

He can be paired with a human, or with a pokemon, it doesn't matter. You can even play by rules that in a time period such as that it may be against the law but as its a frontier type environment, no one really enforces it. It's all possible. This challenge is meant as a fun thing for someone to do if they happen to feel up to taking on a silly little side project.
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I won't be doing this as I already have two stories and i want to focus on them. I know all you other writers have projects as well, so this is not a mandatory challenge.

It's here as a post so that if you decide to take it up, you can. There will be more challenges to come as I think of them, most will just be cute and silly ideas like this one. Best of luck to whomever wishes to take this one up for a One Shot or full on story.
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News: Progress is slow, as usual. However, like Ausare before me, here is some stuff to show I have been working and to give you a taste of Chapter 4.

Chapter 4: Rock Solid

He heard his mother ask something, "Hmm? Oh, I just got to the outskirts of Oreburgh...yea...waiting for the bus...," Magnus watched as his "brother" looked to him, "Magnus is fine, he's gotten bigger...yea Hex and Aztec are doing well too...yes she's still a handful...," the boy listened, hefting his pack, and rolled his eyes, "Yes mom I know that the vase Aztec broke will come out of my earnings...yes...don't worry mom I'm sure I'll do fine at the gym...hey, listen, the bus is coming, I need to go, I'll e-mail you soon, love you."

>>1095
Ennio Morricone's work on the Mission to Mars soundtrack is some seriously gorgeous music.

I might have a crack at that, and I like the idea of this community doing challenge fics.

>>1095
This is a good idea. Banditos doing a train robbery on Rapidash.

A silent Trainer, a single Pokeball on his belt, covered by a flowing serape...if I weren't behind on everything I'd love to do this. Westerns are my favorite movies.

>>1095
Just to keep it in the forefront of the outside world when they look at the summary of the thread.

>>1107
Your imagery shows you would know exactly what to do and would probably enthrall us all with a story that is full of nostalgia for the Italian western as well as the elements of Pokemon.

It would be nice to see someone take this on seriously, simply to see if it would work. I can't as I already have everything my mind can handle. If I add another story I'll overload and short circuit.

Silver Wings and Sin and Punishment are all I can handle right now...and even that feels overwhelming to me.

Best of luck to anyone who takes on this challenge.

Well, now the idea is pulsing maddeningly in my mind. Perhaps to avoid my bad habit of getting distracted with the writer's equivalent of ADD, I'll write it all in one rush and put it up as one chapter.

The sun dipped down below the western horizon, taking the light and most of the heat. Night rose over a scorched and ruined hardpan, little more than sand and rock. A few cacti, sickly and yellow from lack of water, shot up out of the ground. Scrub grass sparsely dotted the ground, jutting up from cracks in the hardpan. Sand dunes blocked sightlines in all directions but south. To the north, mountains like mirages rose and scratched the cloudless navy sky.

He sat in front of a low fire, resting against a dune while his Dodrio slept beside him. He took a small pouch from his bright, multicolored serape and removed a small square paper. Into the paper he carefully dropped some tobacco, which he then rolled and licked closed. He lit the cigarillo from the fire and smoked quietly.

The smoke kept his bright blue eyes at a squint and rose to the brim of his flat hat. It rolled over the edge, passing the higher middle and floating off in the desert air. He ran a thumb over the stubble on his cheek and placed the tobacco pouch back in his pocket. The action briefly exposed his clothes to the elements. A faded blue shirt, missing its top two buttons and open at the throat; a pair of rough and worn-in blue jeans, ending where his tough leather boots began; between the shirt and jeans, a belt, fastened through the loops. An empty Pokeball rested on the left side, a revolver in its smooth brown holster on the right.

News: Chapter 4 is moving at a slugs pace, and its really starting to irk me. I'm also not at all happy with how its coming along. My dialog is okay but I'm hating how I'm identifying who is talking. So and so said, "Bla"

"Bla" said so and so.

"bla bla?" asked so and so.

Yea, its repetitive and its driving me up a wall. I know this can be fixed in editing but right now its causing me to move slower becuase I always want to go back and fix everything. I'm currently just trying to get the chapter roughed out.

I'll need someone to edit it with me once its finished. After chapter 4 is out I might go and work on chapter 3 of SW since someone told be they were looking forward to it with great zeal.

That's about it really.

>>1139

Don't forget that in a one-on-one conversation, you can simply drop the "said ____" (once you've established speaker order) to imply rapid back-and-forth conversation.

Steev inquired "did you get a chance to tell her?"
"No... I couldn't work up the courage", Josiah replied.
"Really?"
"Yeah."

>>1142

This. I know this doesn't help much, but get creative. You don't have to directly say who is talking, but you could include actions of the speaker. I'm sure you'll think of something.

>>1144
Gestures help.

>>1227
Female Char* incomming in chapter 4 of SaP :P

Jaaaaabbers.

>>1241
I'm working on it ragdoll, I'm working on it. And btw, thanks for the pic, it warms my heart to see my namesakes bad-ass mug on my thread. Makes me want to repay you by working as fast as I can.

Text formatting test: Humpty Dumpty had a great fall!

This is a line of dialog from chapter 4, I am just testing to see if it comes out correctly. I'm trying to place emphasis on the word "fall" for reasons I won't go into. If this works let me now.

>>1248
It emphasizes fall through lack of emphasizing features.

Un-italicising text in italicised text has the same effect as italicising text in un-italicised text.

>>1260
>>1262
They've got that covered. Same advice from me.

NEWS!!!!: Chapter 4 has been completed, now its just a matter of editing. So release will be soon, hopefully. I plan to outline Ch 3 of Silver Wings once Ch 4 of SaP is up. I feel so proud of myself.

>>1274
DOUBLE POST!!LOL!!: Also, thanks to Espy and Iruni for helping me past several major writers blocks. Espy gets a gold star becuase he's being my editor and ideas man. Thanks guys, I hope that you will continue to help me out, as the quality of this piece gets better with the aid you give. Than you so much.

NEWS: Chapter 4: Rock Solid: http://anime.adultfanfiction.net/story.php?no=600049220&chapter=4

Link and title is all you need to know. I look forward to everyone's speculations, comments, and criticisms. I will warn you that this chapter is almost 17000 words, so prepare for long reading.

Next on agenda is prepping and writing Chapter 3 of Silver Wings.

I love it. I wasn't sure at first about time-jumping yet again, but this works great. You set up these exarceans to be great villains, by the way. I can't wait to see what happens here!

>>1292
this was the last of the massive time jumps, from now on its only jumps in terms of days or weeks. For instance, the next chapter opens up within Jubilife, which means the time on the road was skipped, but that's because nothing important happened there. I skip time whenever it isn't important. Usually road travel. I don't narrate random trainer battles if I can help it, as that would get boring.

so a couple days to maybe a week if nothing important happens. any developments during said time periods will be covered in the same format the year skips were, memory sequences. I don't think anyone will have problems with this. If they do, I'm sure they'll let me know and also offer a solution. Until then, that's the way of things.

Great chapter, Jabbz. Dante and Aiya seem like cool characters.

To nitpick technically, there was some awkward tense early on, but you either got into the groove or I got caught up in the chapter because I didn't notice it much beyond the first few paragraphs.

>>1294
If you could go back and find them, point them out to me so I can fix them. I would appreciate it.

Actually, looking back I think this is the only line that really made me stumble.

"He had also further established that she was a very gifted individual. Where she had left Canalave reading at a sixth grade level, she now read material that Clause found to be on par with some scholars. She was brainy and smart. She would even invent her own battle strategies on their trip to Oreburgh."

If he's reflecting on the last two years in this section, this paragraph doesn't really make sense. Either he's reflecting on the future, or her strategies happened earlier in the trip and you need to switch the tense.

Sorry if this comes off as nitpicky, I seem to remember you stating somewhere that you wanted just that, but I might be wrong.

>>1298
It's fine, keep nitpicking. How am I supposed to have a well rounded chappy without it? I may never fix my mistakes, but if someone points them out I will. So keep at it :).

>>1298

How's this for a fix?

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He had also further established that she was a very gifted individual. Where she had left Canalave reading at a sixth grade level, she now read material that Clause found to be on par with some scholars. She was brainy and smart. She had often even invented her own battle strategies while they had been traveling to Oreburgh."

If it were me, I'd drop "often". Aside from that, yes. That works fine.

>>1304
Thanks ragdoll, appreciate it.

NEWS: performed a series of edits to Chapter 2 of SW, merely cosmetic, but readers should glance through it anyways just to be up to date. Main change was sex revelation, I'll be using that in the next chapter as the way I did it previously wasn't necessarily believable.

That's all really, now to begin work on Chapter 3.

>>1318
More NEWS: Cursory edits were performed on Chapter's 1 and 4 of SaP. Mostly small word changes, but more importantly time management. I reworked the time taken to travel from a ridiculous amount to something more realistic IMO.

Jubilife -> Oreburgh 2~3 days

As opposed to the 5~7 I had originally. Also changed driving time from 1~2 days to around an hour.

I would appreciate keen eyes to glance through all chapters briefly to look for any indiscrepancies. Let me know if you find anything. Thanks.

Ok, so I finally read chapter two of Silver Wings.


>She was dehydrated, which made him question how long he had been unconscious. He grunted as he stood, his legs aching. He stooped, preparing to lift the moderately sized Pokemon and carry her to the water. He was surprised when he picked her up with little effort, his thoughts racing, 'That's not good.'.


Now you could write this off on ignorance on his part, but being light is a good sign. That's one of the weird things about life and death. When someone is alive, they are much lighter and easier to move about. However, after they die, they become heavier in weight, and are often harder to move about because of this, even after rigermortis has subsided. So Nami being light is a GOOD sign.

>However when some of the fresh water got into his mouth and he swallowed it, he had never thought water could taste so good. He drank greedily as she hosed him down, shaking his head to make sure he was completely soaked. His body felt a lot better afterward, and the breeze brushing along his damp skin made him feel refreshed.


I see him acting like a dog being sprayed with a hose, chasing after the stream of water with his mouth.

>It was roughly five feet from head to tail. Its pristine white skin shone like snow. Its breast and stomach, the small quills that protruded from its back, the tail flukes, and the spikes that surrounded its bright blue eyes, were a dark cobalt blue.

Welcome, love interest!

>He bit into it, and almost gagged, but his hunger soon pushed aside any preference for taste.

Raw fish isn't that bad. I mostly gag on it because I choked on an anchovy one day while young... so now fish bone makes me uneasy... although I guess that's true with most people who don't eat fishbone as a delicacy.


>He heard a sudden ripping sound, and looked over to find the Lugia with a large chunk of the Magikarp in its beak-like jaws, it jerked its head and swallowed it, bending down to tear off more.


It would have been better if she just swallowed it like an egret... whole.

Also, the part about the fire... you've never build a fire from nothing before, have you...? Driftwood and kelp isn't exactly the best material to make a fire from, as both tend to be damp to the core, kelp unbelievably so. In fact, I'd be more inclined to try to eat the kelp if in dire straights than try to even light a fire with it. In fact, most plant material is a bit too wet to try to start easily, the water within the cells preventing it from igniting. On the type of island he's on, you should be able to find plenty of dried out grass of various types. Maybe some shrubs.

Going the route he's taking, he'll be frustrated, tired, hungry, and cold... with no fire.

>...growling softly and ruffling its wings in apprehension.


Birds hiss, flatten feathers and crests, and raise wings ever so slightly, tucking the forearm of the wings into their back. It's kinda like tucking your arms into themselves and pressing them forwards then clucking and chanting chicken. Although, that right there is a chicken fighting taunt itself.

Here is a semi-good example.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CipLUCKinN8&

However, the individual crest movements is unique to this species line as not all birds have it, but they still have similar vocabulary across species lines in other areas. Notice how the crest is upwards at the beginning, denoting curiosity, excitement, intent and interest. Then as the hand moves in, the bird lowers its head and crest, sticking wings out ever so slightly (this one didn't do it as much as usual as it's not trying to actually start a fight) and makes its presence ever so smaller. This individual bird is simply saying, "fuck off!"

>>1339
god damn, finally! about time someone other than Iruni or Nona said something! Iruni and Espy have an excuse, but no one else does. Why is it my request for comments and such has gone ignored? I know Equilibrium is cool and all, but come on people, I'm looking to improve my skill here. Can't do that without feedback.

I would get a pro author/critic to help me...but fanfics are usually a waste of their time. Sure I try to get inspired from them, maybe even vaguely ask their advice on a certain interaction, but I wouldn't have them read this stuff.

I need to know what people think, and what I might want to change. All so I can learn and grow. I'm writing both these stories for my enjoyment sure, I want to tell them. However I'm also using them as a playground to get better at writing and story telling so I can better my original works.

Come on people, help a fellow out.

Just so readers stay up to date, I may be taking on a really slow update schedule, slower than the one I've been pulling for 4 chapters. Life has taken its toll on me, and thus i have less time to write than before. Add into that any writers blocks and it'll be a miracle if people even remember these stories when I update them. Needles to say, I will be working on both in whatever free time I may have. Silver Wings Ch 3 is moving along nicely, and once its released I will begin work on chapter 5 of SaP.

Hope this helps you readers out there to understand that I'm not, not writing out of laziness, but out of necessity to get my life in order. Thanks for whatever comments you have given. I appreciate them. Hopefully the silence I endure won't last forever. I do hope to see more thoughts on my work popping up in this thread. I'll continue writing regardless.

Silver Wings: Chapter 3: Lessons
http://anime.adultfanfiction.net/story.php?no=600049482&chapter=3

Read, review, comment, criticize, all that good stuff. Now, to decide whether I should start SaP ch 5 or SW Ch 4 next. Unsure, so outside opinion would be appreciated here. Until then, I'll be taking a bit of a breather mayhaps...ah who am I kidding, I think I'll start working on SW 4. The plot needs to pick up the pace.

God DAMMIT why do people only upload when I have a ton of homework that shouldn't be procrastinated ;-;

I like this. It's rather cute. Especially the concept of a Lugia sniffing around like some kind of bloodhound.

He should totally start his training career with a Vaporeon and a Lugia.

Chapter 4 of SW is moving along after 2 weeks of stagnant nothingness. If I can keep moving with it, I expect it to be done within the area of next week.

Props to Iruni and Espy for being my support through my lazy and procrastinating times. I can be a severe pain in that department. However the engine has started again, so hopefully it won't stop until Ch 4 is done.

Thanks guys, you're a big help.

Excellent news!

Could someone give me a list of regions or nations that are in pokemon official cannon? I would like options for future plot points in SaP. Name, and summary would be appreciated.

Kanto Region: Found in games: R,G,B,Y,G,S,C,FR,LG,HG,SS. Gym Types: Rock, Water, Electric, Grass, Psychic, Poison, Fire, Ground. Evil Team: Rocket. League location: Indigo Plateau.

Johto Region: Found in games: G,S,C,HG,SS. Gym Types: Flying, Bug, Normal, Ghost, Fighting, Steel, Ice, Dragon. Evil Team: Rocket. League location: Indigo Plateau.

Hoenn Region: Found in games: R,S,E. Gym Types: Rock, Fighting, Electric, Fire, Normal, Flying, Psychic, Water. Evil Team: Magma, Aqua. League location: Evergrand City.

Sevii Islands: Found in games: FR,LG,E(To some extent. only event islands for Mew and Deoxys.) Gym Types: none. Evil Team: Rocket. League location: none.

Sinnoh Region: Found in games: D,P,PT. Gym Types: Rock, Grass, Ghost, Fighting, Water, Steel, Ice, Electric. Evil Team: Galactic. League location: Pokemon League (unnamed island).

Isshu Region: Found in games: B,W. Gym Types: unknown. Evil Team: unknown. League location: unknown.

Orre Region: Found in games: COL,XD. Gym Types: None. Evil Team: Snagem, Cipher. League location: none.

Fiore Region: Found in games: Ranger. Gym Types: None. Evil Team: Go-Rock Squad. League location: none.

Almia Region: Found in games: Ranger SoA. Gym Types: none. Evil Team: Dim Sun. League location: none.

Oblivia Region: Found in games: Ranger 3(no english title as of yet.) Gym Types: none. Evil Team: Pokemon Nappers. League location: none.

Holon Region: Found only in the TCG. Gym Types: unknown. Evil Team: unknown. League location: unknown. The Holon region is only found in the Holon expansion of the TCG. In it, are included Pokemon that are of types that differ from their natural typing (Gardevoir is Psychic/Steel or Fire) dubbed Delta Species. The Delta Species pokemon retain their natural weaknesses and resistances, however.

Unknown Locations: Sinjoh Ruins.

=_=....progress = slow...all this time for only a short SW chapter...WTF is wrong with me...patience people...patience...I just need to beat myself over the head...get really moving.

Does anyone know of a good cure for having way to many distractions? I can't seem to get up enough gumption to turn off my web browser or my chat programs OR my Wii OOOOORRR my DS...do in short I haven't been writing at all...Iruni's been a soldier and constantly trying to push me when he probably should just ditch me...and I'm pissed a bit at myself for turning into something akin to Slash Fakerstorm. Meaning I've turned into someone who updates once in a solar eclipse...or less. Turning off the distractions only works for so long, cause I'll find myself turning them back on through habit. In short...I need some form of boost. Something to keep me writing so I can get back into the game. It's not like I'm doing anything important. I want to finish SW 4 before I start taking Drivers Ed classes n the 5th of July.

Write word/openoffice/notepad/whatever you use into your startup programs. Remove MSN/Skype/AIM/Yahoo/IRC from startup.

Take the shortcut to your web browser off of your desktop and out of your quicklaunch.

Works for me when I'm supposed to get shit done.

At least you update.

WTF Monster Hunter Tri! Seriously...and today my parental units want me to clean house...and its July now...I need to get driving somehow but the school I thought I was registered for...doesn't seem to be interested in talking to me any more...so now to find another one. So in short.

ISSUES: job, driving, school, games, family, house, chats, certain people, and myself.

Yeah.

Okay, birthday madness took hold over the past couple of days, so no writing has been done for those days. Thanks to Iruni, the next chapter of SW is nearing completion at a faster pace than I was writing it before. I expect it to be done somewhere around Monday or Tuesday as there is still some stuff to do over the weekend not revolving around my writing.

I'm probably going to get stomped by a bunch of you guys for taking so long with the usual short SW chapter, but a lot of shit happened that I have to take the blame for anyway.

On a side note I have some good and bad news. Good news, I'm now "sort of" writing again and SW is going to have its next chapter out soon...hopefully. Bad news...I'm most likely going to shelve my SW project for awhile so as to get reacquainted with SaP. I want to push SaP up to the point where I had left of before starting my reconstruction/rewrite. Don't worry, SW will be finished, I just want to focus on my original brainchild and get it moving again.

That's about it really. I hope this update pleases some of you out there. Be ready to R+R SW when its updated.

Well I lied about getting it out by monday~teusday but chapter 3 of SW is finally finished, however readers will have to wait for a bit as Iruni is working on going through my draft. So once its corrected and all that good stuff, I'm sure everything will be set for it to post. Not sure when the editing process will be over, but you'll know when there's a nice message here saying "look at what I did!" lol.

Until then, have fun doing whatever you guys and gals do.

>>1577
Oops, I meant chapter 4.

Holy crap I'm alive! And I have something for all of you...finally...Come one come all and read chapter 4 of Silver Wings: Goodbye, for now...

R+R, and enjoy. Now I get to tank on SaP 5...WHOOOO!!

link: http://anime.adultfanfiction.net/story.php?no=600049482&chapter=4

>>1608
also...thanks to Iruni...A LOT...because he had the strength and fortitude to continue pestering me to write and pushing editing alongside me. He's a great friend, and I really really REALLY want him to be recognized for helping me. So go read Dark Type, and Unexpected Conflagration. Give him many props, and all that jazz. But besides that, do enjoy this tiny morsel of around 7K words or more. THANKS IRUNI!!! And thanks readers for being patient in the extreme. Catch you all later.

>>1608
>>1610
Always glad to help out.

Go read this /canalave/! It's a great chapter. Discuss it too! We're the 5th most active board this week, we're coming out of our slump!

Digletts unrelated.

Awh man, I feel for him. If he'd had some pokeballs with him, he could've caught the Lugia, beaten the poachers AND the monk and sailed into the sunset~

I kid, I kid. Looking forward to the next - be it this or SaP.

>>1635
Thanks ragdoll for the swell comments. As of now though I'm struggling with trying to lay out SaP 5. I have a lot of weaknesses that I want help with getting past plot and development wise. There are some things me and Iruni are discussing but I still lack certain means to write what I want to. I'll give a small spoiler and say that my problems are revolving around creating adequate filler and character development to expand and rebuild on what I had before. Dante, and Hex are all elements and wild cards that now mean my story can take drastically different paths through its plot than it did previously. I'm feeling a bit overwhelmed and a bit freaked out with the daunting prospect of dealing with it.

Another problem is that I prefer to work with someone while outlining so that I can be kept on the straight and narrow. However relying on others is a bad thing...right? I don't think it is but hey.

The upside is that having partners is what made the reconstruction/rewrite I'm doing the better work that it is now.

So yeah, it'll be a bit before things are straightened out enough to actually start writing. As reassurance, I'm fired up about the prospect of SaP 5 so distractions will hopefully be easily avoided.

Wish me luck, I'll need it.

I've fallen into my old sentence by sentence style that comes with a bad thought process, but at least I'm working again. This rebuild is going to be annoying because I'm so used to what I did already. Often times I wonder if I'm crazy for starting this.

As it is, I'm worried for SaP. More people seem to like SW, but SaP was my starting piece. If I could get some kind of feedback as to what is drawing more people to one over the other, maybe I could improve on what I'm doing.

As it is I'm shadowed by Equilibrium and Ragnarok. Iruni's got his own group of followers. Not saying I need them, I would just like to know if there's something wrong that I could fix.

>>1664

I enjoy SaP quite thoroughly. I would suggest, though, that you develop whichever one is giving you the most joy to write. You shouldn't be writing to or for a userbase.

>>1665
That's true, I keep forgetting that.

>>1666
Damn it firefox! Why can't you make my life easier and just remember to input my name. Arg!

So I figured an update was in order since I'll be gone fore a week starting today (not that anyone will notice considering the fact that I never really update to begin with). I figure, like Iruni, I can try my hand at weekly updates of some sort...or just updates in general when I feel like it.

Today's update brings you: a status report.
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Sin and Punishment: Chapter 5 has started and has reached its 3~4th page (ZOMG! I'm actually working) and still going. Progress is slower than I would like, but at least its progress. Better than being distracted by innumerable amounts of things on a constant basis.

Silver Wings: On hold until I feel the urge to add another chapter, mainly because I've missed SaP so much that I want to spend some quality time with it. HOWEVER...I do have a chapter title for you. As of now, Chapter 5 will be dubbed Childhood's End, so feast on the possibilities of that while I grind away Ch5 of SaP.
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Iruni should get more praise, because he's continuing to help me brainstorm and get past humps, and in general just be an awesome friend. So credit where credit is due. As usual thanks to those that did read, and hope you stay involved. Catch you all later.

I have returned and have good news, I just saved a bunch of money on my car insurance by switching to Geico...No wait...what?

Actually I have made progress, approximately...one scene's worth of material is completed and as some of you are aware, SaP's scenes can go on for awhile.

with the urge to write reawakened, a lot of things are going to take second place...even though I now have access to internet once again. Trust me when I say it was the most progression I ever made in a long time.

So, with that, I shall return to the writers forge and hopefully continued the spree I started during my week long absence (Not that anyone noticed). Back at it I go, catch you later.

Almost forgot the weekly update for this week. So hence, status report!

Silver Wings: Still on hold because... yeah no need to go into that.

Sin and Punishment: The 5th chapter got done in record time, and is in Beta phase right now in the hands of the all powerful Iruni. My guesstimate is that It'll be posted some time today or tomorrow.

Also, Skyler, I don't know if you read SaP any more, but when I said I was rebuilding everything I meant EVERYTHING. You might take an interest in what happens in this chapter since you knew the original before I pulled it.

Other than that, keep an eye out for updates and such. Catch you later.

>>1713
On hold?! But I like Silver Wings! :(


...not that I don't like SaP.

>>1713
I'm not 'all powerful', I just help people.

And heads up people, chapter inbound.

http://anime.adultfanfiction.net/story.php?no=600049220&chapter=5

New Chapter for those interested. Picture is relevant (sorta-kinda).

R+R, and such. Title: New Directions. Chapter 6 will begin constructing as soon as I brainstorm a bit. Catch you all later.

You know what I think of the chapter already, as I've helped in more ways than I probably should've, but you'll probably just tell me to take my credit and deal with it.

Anywho, if you want a formal review, this'll probably be less than satisfactory, in terms of new opinions.

Overall, one of the more pleasant to read chapters in a long time, perhaps because of the less-than-usual length, but I know you prefer long chapters anyway (and this was in fact supposed to include the material from your previous 5, but now split to save from epic length).

Dante never ceases to amuse me with his overall bluntness, that'll likely cause more trouble than he's worth at some point. Good thing he and Aiya are more than capable at handling themselves.

As I said in my first review, I like Hex. And now that this new development has arisen, I'm all the more pleased.

Looking forward to what you'll include in your next chapter, and as always, I'm glad I could help out in any way.

Well I can say I really really REALLY enjoyed this chapter. The wholehex thing kinda took me by surprise but I am still pleased with how it looks like it's gonna turn out. Dante is as awesome as ever, and so is clauses mum.

It was an enjoyable read and as usual, you played the brotherly relationship between Magnus and Claude very well. If I do have any complaints, then the fact that I would have preferred the chapter to be longer, but I'm not one to talk, seeing as I haven't updated TMH in like 5 years.

On a related note, I WILL be updating, and soon too. Perhaps I should starty own thread?

>>1723
Urgj. Blame spelling errors / wrong words on the iPhones predictive bullshit text thing.

>>1723
Hot damn I have a comment, this is the best day ever. Thanks Skrewd my man, and yes, please make a thread here. That way I can read it and stuffs. You wanted it to be longer? You're one of the few people that says that. Mostly people want my chapters more handle-able. If memory serves me correctly this latest Chapter is around 20~21 pages. You must have rocketed through it.

Glad you liked it. Keep eyes open for Chapter 6. Depending on scheduling it could be out just as quickly as 5. Catch you later Skrewd.

Mmm, good chapter. You frequently set up plot points which I expect not to work, and then make them work anyway.

Cool main pairing, also. Though I'd prefer being in Dante's position to Clause's.

>>1730
Umm...what? Care to be a bit more specific ragdoll? And why would you rather be in Dante's shoes anyway? You like Charmeleons?

Thanks for the comments though. I appreciate them ^_^.

>>1736

It's a bit hard to explain. Like, when the narrative started hinting that Big Things regarding the main pairing were going to happen in short order, I couldn't imagine how you'd introduce that at this juncture in a natural and believable manner. But then you did.

Don't read into it too much, it's neither a criticism nor a compliment, and not something you need to change. Just musing.

And hell yeah I like me some Charmeleon :'D

>>1737
Heh, glad you like Dante. I'm proud of his success with readers that comment (Now in an easily manageable list: ragdoll, Iruni, Espy, Skrewd, and occasionally... Psyence.)

And I appreciate the comments, and now I understand sort of what you mean by Big Things. Though more clarification might be needed because I'm dumb like that. But its nice to know I have a style that works.

Iruni helps a lot when I get stuck, and well... let's just say there are more surprises down the road that might knock you for a loop.

As for anything involving Dante, I can't say as his presence has shifted several events due to his status as a companion character. Several moments where Cluase had to deal with things alone original, they've been changed. It's a great experience let me tell you.

That's about it really, so I'll catch you later.

Only occasionally? I can submit my reviews in email form if you're concerned about stuff. Plus that allows for easy replies.

Just now getting around to reading the latest chapter.

Hot DAMN this bit with Hex is one of the most well written...Just...wow. Jabbz, you. are. awesome.

This entire chapter is just...exceptional. It's just so...good. I really enjoyed reading it.

>>1751
What I meant by that was that I haven't heard from you in awhile.

>>1757
thanks for the comments man, appreciate them.

CHALLENGE!!!

I need a logo for the Heaven's Gate Corporation. Unfortunately while I can draw characters and ships and other sundry things, I can't make decals or simple logos. It's always been beyond my grasp to think that simplistically.

So anyone interested, draw a logo for the Corporation and post it here with a description in text of what it looks like that can be used in story form.

Guidelines: Has to have the letters H and G in it. Or the full name 'Heavens Gate'. That's about it. Should be something you'll see on things like laptops and such, iconic and recognizable.

I'll make up something as a place holder for now so I can continue writing. Catch you later.

Very simple, but get's the job done. How's this strike ya?

oops, left the font grouped.

LETS TRY THAT AGAIN

Oh wow, its Tuesday already (1:42AM) and I JUST realized I forgot to give a weekly update on saturday. So here's the delayed one... yay.

Chapter 5 is... halted for the moment (at one paragraph no less) because I've had some editing things to do with an old associate of mine. Other than that... I have plans and I shall put them in motion... hopefully before Halo Reach comes out.

Unfortunately there is the issue that I will have a job I need to practice for come next saturday. It's a one day thing but its getting me money I need. So writting will be one of the things I need to do, and other things will take a cut.

Other than that, well... yeah. I won't be jumping on the preview band wagon unless I find it necessary. That's about it. Catch you all later.

So yes, the picture IS relevant. Late last night, like the idiot I am who never listens to his parents warnings because I'm always SO FUCKING CAREFUL, I knocked my laptop off the arm of the chair I was sitting on.

Good News? The hard drive and stuff still works and the computer operates just fine. Bad News? I can't see a fucking thing on the screen except in a very small portion of the upper left quarter of it.

This means what? Well it means that I won't be getting writing or ANYTHING else done until I get the LCD fixed/replaced (Which is possible but with my family's budget isn't likely any time in the near future).

So this also means the only way anyone who knows me will be able to get in touch with me is through e-mail. As all my chat's including IRC were on that machine.

I feel incredibly guilty/angry/horrified. I'm quite upset in other words. Can't wait to see what my parents think (oh joy). So until this problem is fixed... no writing (it's not that I don't have back ups. It's that the back ups are out dayed and it would mean trying to remember things I wrote (my fault again). Also every other computer is my Dad's or Mom's so using the to write this kind of thing (though they know about it) isn't exactly a good idea.

So I'm doing this damn update while people are away. And suffering inside due to how I was going to write today. But hey, this was bound to happen at some point. Lady Luck always saves her worst for me when I least expect it. Still my fault but it just felt so random.

That's it for now, I'll catch you all later.

>>1775
dayed = dated.

>>1775
And also "using the to write" = "using them." Damn typos.

>>1775

Oh god, I'm so sorry! I had that happen to my iBook years ago, and the warranty had just expired.

You did get the warranty on your MacBook, right?

Lesson learned, I guess. Hope it doesn't cost too much to repair :C

>>1778
I do, but that warranty doesn't cover self inflicted things...such as dropping the computer and shattering the LCD. It does protect the hard-drive though so, say the computer was freezing, or had a virus, or something else like that. THEN the warranty would cover it. So what I've found out from some forums is that replacing the LCD will cost somewhere in the range of $200-$400.

So yeah, I'm kinda stuck for awhile. The only thing I can do is count the days as by stories start to eat my brain. To Iruni: E-mail me what I did with chapter 6 anyway, I'll probably remember pieces and plans and explode with memories as I write.

However if I show my face often on any chat, it'll be because my Dad's not using the computer (Which is once in a solar eclipse). SO yeah, lets just hope I find a way to get something done.

Catch you later.

>>1783

I was thinking of the expanded warranty, then, which was probably expensive.

Don't you have a computer monitor or something that's free to use in your house? You could just plug up your laptop's external display adapter and run your laptop from there. That's what I used to do until I replaced the system.

>>1784
if I did do you think I'd be making such a fuss about this?

>>1794

Yes. After all, you just smashed your laptop screen; and whether you had an external monitor to continue using said laptop would have little effect on your feelings on said damage. However, I assume that by your statement, you do not have an external monitor, so... shit sucks. Sorry. :(

>>1797

indeed it does. Though if you know what kind of wire and plug I need, ththen by all means link me some info and prices and that can hold me over until we have enough moo-la to replace the screen. I'm not sure what plug on the side of the laptop is the external monitor plug, and the plugs are different from the one's I'm used to seeing. It's a 2006-2007, white, 13" macbook. So yeah, help doing research is appreciated.

>>1798
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Mini_DisplayPort
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Mini-DVI
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Micro-DVI

One of these, maybe? I don't know shit about macs and there doesn't seem to be information on wikipedia about the display-outs on macbooks prior to 2008.

I would imagine you need whatever that is -> vga or dvi.

An HDMI cable should work

>>1802

Don't listen to this person, he knows nothing (although a miniDVI to HDMI would work).

>>1799

This person knows something. The MacBook uses a Mini-DVI display port, so you'll just need a Mini-DVI to DVI or VGA adapter.

http://www.bestbuy.com/site/Dynex%26%23174%3B+-+Mini+DVI-to-DVI+Adapter/8424305.p?skuId=8424305&id=1182557417274
http://www.bestbuy.com/site/Dynex%26%23153%3B+-+Mini+DVI-to-VGA+Adapter/8424378.p?skuId=8424378&id=1181832624276

Which ever one your external monitor supports. If you have DVI, I recommend going that route instead of VGA as the visual quality on a digital display is much higher with a pure digital signal.

>>1804
quality I could care less about as long as I can see what should be on my screen and write and stuff. I'll be fine. Though thanks all of you for your input.

>>1804
Is there variants of that cord that are longer than that? Because it would make it rather difficult to type with a cord that short.

>>1808
never mind, just my brain being an idiot and not picking up on the whole "adapter" portion of what you said.

WHOOOOOOOOOOO!!! I got a external monitor! I can now get back to business, meaning I can work on chapter 6. I'm so ecstatic right now. I've been having SO many ideas. It's been painful. I'm glad to be back.

You're welcome. ^_^

*huggle*

Well, it's been awhile, but here's a weekly update.

Not much to say really. Halo Reach came out and that has delayed progress, but not for long. I've been getting bits and pieces done between games. The opening for the next chapter should prove a pleasant break from the usual openers, but no spoilers for you guys here.

Other than that, I got nothing else. So catch all you guys and gals later.

On a SaP related note, I just finished reading this:

http://anime.adultfanfiction.net/story.php?no=600050378&chapter=3

It's an enjoyable read, and I'm going to suggest that you read it now. And review of course.

It seems those russians next door have finally dispersed their party, so maybe I can get some sleep at 12:35 AM. I could hear their music through a 2 foot thick solid concrete wall. Then again, if this continues I'm not going to sleep till 1. I find myself driven to untold new levels of profanity. The curses issuing forth from my mouth have reached truly sublime levels, and I suspect that I may go down as one of the great masters of the art, who reached his pinnacle on this dead of night.

I hate that bastard.

Oh, pardon the link, that's to chapter 3. Here we are.

http://anime.adultfanfiction.net/story.php?no=600050378&chapter=1

>>1862

omg this is fantastic

So...After seeing two chapters from what I see as the greatest minds of our board (including Espy and the others but they haven't posted much of anything in a bit) I'm feeling small and insignificant, as usual.

So while I go hide in a hole somewhere until I figure out what exactly is wrong with my work that warrants few comments and even less discussion and critique, enjoy this little update of the week.

SaP 6 is moving along semi-nicely (until I realized i'm a gnat on the face of the earth). There is once again little plot development in it in terms of where the story is going but it IS mainly a character driven chapter. Action will be occurring after this chapter, then maybe another lul for a bit.

AS you all can see, I'm feeling bitter and self centered, so just put up with mt annoying mood at the moment because it will eventually evaporate once I realize that the outside world's opinion doesn't actually matter.

Of course my whole goal was to write a good story that was enjoyable and a a decent read, but that's kind of hard when your overshadowed by so many people. Guess you could say I'm starving for a small ego boost, as I don't really have one to begin with.

Anywho, I'll be working on 6 as soon as I get out of my stooper (spelling?) which should be by this evening. And I will now take the time to advertise an old acquaintance of mine's venture to write a parallel to my story.

Check out his profile, read his work, and help him flourish. Be Constructive and courteous, Psyence has already found him so I figured it was time I introduced it in a more... public manner.

http://anime.adultfanfiction.net/authors.php?no=1296884102

Check out his other work on FF.net as well, I recommend Ti Amo personally as I actually have been involved with it for quite some time and its progress is still ongoing.

http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1232546/Spog_the_Brick_in_The_Wall

Anyways, that's it for this update, I'll catch you all later. Luck be with you.

>>1862
Oh, Psy seems to have already mentioned it. Well, that's what I get for not reading. No harm done.

I just scrapped an encouragement post ranking enjoyable reads. Why? Torches, pitchforks and awkward explanations.

Suffice it to say Jabbz, that your works hold -very- high spots on my "Fun to read" list.

And don't go changing it. Or fretting about it (more likely). It was a joke. I know how you are.

And so help me if you neglect Silver Wings. My Typhlosion would like a word with you if you do.

Looking at your third post in the thread, Fedoras are infinitely better than Bowlers.

As a closing note to my extremely well constructed, flawlessly executed, and exceedingly well written and thought out essay about stuff, I would like to say this:

Jabbz, if I thought your story was shit, I'd call it shit and actively try and get this thread locked. The fact that you're here, writing a reply to this thread, and not having people say "This needs work. A lot of work" should tell you that your story is, at worst, of acceptable levels of readability, enjoyability and quality. At the absolute best, people are thinking that this is sacred and holy, and merely commenting upon such a gloriously magnificent work of art would be like leaving a scribbled note next to David or the Mona Lisa saying "This is great."

Which is more than I can hope for in what I write.


Or you could look at it like this: All the great guys had to die to have their stuff appreciated. You don't want to die do you?

Okay good. Now please continue your thankless toiling. The Temple of Zeus didn't build itself you know!

>>1882
thank you Psyence, you made me smile, you always do. You're a very eccentric man you are. And don't worry, Silver Wings isn't neglected or abandoned. I'll be on it as soon as I'm caught up. I actually might wait till a certain point... let's just say there's a nice development in store that I'm still working out.

Thanks again.

Volume of response has nothing to do with quality of content in this niche of the internet. It always astounded me that people were bumping Iota's tale daily while Espy went without comments.

Or that people wrote essays on lemon chapters of Sinners while Skyler was putting out engaging storyline.

Hell, there are a few complete stories that have slipped completely under the radar on AFF.

It's not even limited to Pokemon. Cyberano (http://www.fanfiction.net/u/1181578/Cyberano) wrote three complete stories, detailing his take on the Most Adorable Macross Frontier Post-Series Universe, getting barely a single comment on each.

Do it for the love of the canon, and for the people that do read. Net-fame is overrated anyway - the more success you achieve, the more trolls you attract.

>>1886
That's true, but my main worry is that no one is doing MY job. I talked to Iruni about this, and its pretty weird. I spent 2 years as a critic on FF.net. As someone who would try and leave balanced and full reviews that were as well... blunt and honest as possible. In my experience I found that no beginning writer ever makes a story that doesn't have something that needs fixing. And me going through this story and only getting the occasional spelling and grammar notification is odd. I don't have people giving me hard critiques. Ones that list the good and the possibly bad aspects I can fix.

I was hopping Skyler would be intrigued by the fact that everything is changing in this. Despite the same tittle as before, its a different animal. Chapter 5 should make that obvious to anyone who knows the in depth plot of the old one (Iruni, Espy, Spog, Skyler).

I have low confidence and self esteem, and I need boosts every once in awhile to keep going (Iruni has been a trooper and he's been dealing with my current state rather well, so I'm back at the old keyboard working as hard as I can.)

I have faults, I try to keep them steady and to myself...but sometimes its almost impossible to do that. I guess I might be a bit needy, I want some form of reassurance that there is something wrong that i can fix or if there isn't just say it and that way I can keep ticking with the old writing machine.

I'm not strong, like all of you guys. Psyence was a brave guy to post what he had (Hope you're actually working on it to make it better >_>) and despite the somewhat mediocre reception and pulling it down, he's still as Psyence as he ever was.

All you guys have some form of ego, or strength that allows you to keep working. I wish I had that, but I don't. It's hard for me to believe in myself. I could help others till the end of the world, but I find I can't help myself.

I mean, Nona, Psy, I thank you for the support, but you should probably not even be doing this. I mean, I shouldn't even need help. Yet here I am, I have Iruni latched to both stories as a guy that helps me with ideas and writing, but he has barely anyone except Skyler. But that's only for the parallel aspect. Everyone here is so... secluded in their own work, they can write it without talking about it to someone close. They don't need a editor or a sounding board a lot of the time.

I envy that. I want to be like you guys with the whole "lone wolf writer that needs no one to help them" thing. But I'm not, and I can't.

Ugh, I started ranting and just bleeding my feelings out. Like this is some damn diary or counciling (spelling?) thread. Truth be told I know I shouldn't get a response to this, but deep on some level inside my head, I hope I do. Maybe I'm just an attention whore. I don't know any more. I wish I did.

I think Iruni deserves a lot of credit, I think everyone should give him a good amount of attention, because he has to deal with me and write his own work. That takes strength, more strength than I have. So please, everyone read his work, help him soar. I'll be puttering with my little piece over here in the mean time.

>>1887

I’m not good with the motivational spiel, but I’ll try.

Despite what I like to think sometimes, I am not a professional writer. I make mistakes. I make hundreds of them in every chapter, and fortunately there are people who point out as many as they can so I can fix them. Some problems with the story, though, can’t be repaired by swapping a letter or deleting a double sentence. Little holes in the plot, shallow characterization, etc. Don’t put any of us up on a pedestal. The internet is the great equalizer.

It’s not equal in the sense that everyone gets the same amount of exposure and gets hit with praise and attacks from all sides, no. Ragdoll mentioned Sinners; it’s little more than wish fulfillment and a soapbox with a thin veneer of plot, but the sheer traffic it gets would suggest it’s the greatest thing since the moon landing. It’s not.

We don’t get hard critiques because our stories don’t have to stand up against scrutiny by a very large community. There are a few dozen of us here, and the numbers for AFF can’t be much more than a thousand. None of us are English or literature majors (as far as I know). We’re writers. Every one of us has a somewhat skewed perspective because we’re trying to foster a community, and stepping on toes isn’t going to strengthen it any.

You’ve got issues? Fine. Join the club. I’m wound tighter than a spring in a Swiss watch, so there. There’s no polling sample here to determine “normal.” If you want to release your emotions, do it in your writing. It’s what makes it real.

We are not islands. Each of us has their own place to retire to and write, but this site is the village square. None of our stories would grow and change if we cut ourselves off, connecting only momentarily to upload the latest chapter. We would be doing ourselves no favors by being lone wolves. The story has to come from you. There’s no getting around that and there’s no reason to get around it, otherwise it’s not your tale. But writing a story and discussing it aren’t mutually exclusive.

As for not needing an editor: we do. I don’t use an editor for Equilibrium and with every new chapter there’s a string of posts about what I need to fix.

If you want to grow your ego, and I think you do, find the line between humility and self-deprecation, and get back on the humility side. And then find the line between humility and pride and cross that. By posting a story you’ve said that you think this is worthy of other people’s time. You can’t say that and then rail against yourself. Puff yourself up a bit, and just maybe you’ll get the critics you so desire. No one wants to tear down a man who has already put himself in the ground.

I’ll leave you with a short poem that’s fueled me on many nights (the underscores are mine, those lines should be tabbed):

But words are things, and a small drop of ink
_____Falling like dew, upon a thought, produces
That which makes thousands, perhaps millions, think;
_____Tis strange, the shortest letter which man uses
Instead of speech, may form a lasting link
_____Of ages; to what straits old Time reduces
Frail man, when paper—even a rag like this,
Survives himself, his tomb, and all that’s his.

—Lord Byron, Don Juan, Canto the Third, Stanza 88

Iruni's not an island, man. He has this shitty editor working for him who keeps missing crap :P

>>1895
Don't you go and beat yourself up over tiny things like an errant letter or two. You're editing and other commentary are invaluable, trust me.

On Topic: You know how and what I've said on the matter. I don't write for fame, I write for myself. Extra comments are always a plus, but rarely come when you would want them to.

>>1896

Awh, mixing up your/you're to make me feel needed. "Your" such a bro~

>>1894
And another member joins the fray. Well, I guess you're right Skyler. And I guess everyone here is right. Either way I appreciate all the people came to this thread just to get after me a bit.

I'm not sure how to respond to it all other than: Ragdoll, stop worrying about it. If Iruni says you're helping, you're helping. Be happy with that.

Umm...in other news progress is a bit slow despite me getting back to work. I would like not to have to read about the science of relationship mechanics, but it looks like I might have to.

Umm...yeah, that's all I can think of really.

>>1897
Yew no im their four you; bro.

But seriously. Jabbz, when can we expect the newest chapter?

O hai jabbz, I'm in your threadz, replying to your posts.

Well, guy, I understand the annoyance of lack of reviews; you know Ti Amo is the only really successful fic I've written. But hey, we's'a here for you man. Now I give my ode to you with a band you find so funny you can't take it seriously; my comrade of writing.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=N0WZY1aUK3U

>>1900

Auhm..

I actually.. enjoy 3iob as a serious band..

:C

>>1904

Oh I do too, but take it up with Jabbz; first time I introduced him to 3IOB he said he couldn't stop laughing and take it seriously. Heretic.

>>1905
oh come on, voices that high pitched are impossible to take seriously. I'm sorry but its the truth.

>>1905

They are pretty funny. But I got about as far as the... I think it's a C6, the guitar plays a C5 there - near the end of Deadly Sinners, and I realised they weren't actually fucking around.

Well I grant that they know how to play, and yeah I like their stuff, but its just the high pitched voices man. It's hard to take someone seriously who's singing that high. Especially for me. I forget which song Spog sent, but I still have trouble not laughing to it.

Speaking of Spog. Get some more Ti Amo done damn you!

>>1907
Which Deadly Sinners? The one from "Fire Up The Blades" or "Advance & Vanquish"? And yes, allot of their material is slightly goofy fantasy stuff, but it's still true metal IMO, and despite all the standard fantasy-metal routines, I still take them half-seriously. They're mainly just a band for fun, it seems; they're not too serious like allot of metal bands try to be.

>>1908
The song I sent was "Premonition Of Pain"

And sorry about Ti Amo, but I haven't found the inspiration to start writing it yet. You'll just have to do with SSS; and Aealo which you don't read :P

Looks like my thread is starting to go the way of Ausare's, only instead of food its metal bands. This should be amusing.

Speaking of Ausare... we haven't heard from him in awhile. IS he still around?

>>1909

The "original version" bonus track from Advance and Vanquish.

>>1910

I certainly hope Ausare is still around, that last chapter would be a really cruel place to leave everyone.

>>1911
Well, seeing as he hasn't updated in a vast measurable amount of time, I can't really see him as being around at the current moment in time. Maybe he'll pop back up at some point later on.

In other news, its update time. Yes, I skipped a week, but I didn't really have anything to report. However, now I do. I'm about... I'd say half way through the plot of chapter 6, and let me tell you (big hint here) I'm not good at developing a relationship. It's quite possibly the hardest thing for me to do in existence.

However Iruni has been helping me get through that. And with any luck this chapter might actually be done within the next week at best. And unlike all you people giving out little tidbits and the like, I'm feeling I'm so awesome and godly I don't even have to stoop to that level... I'm kidding though. I've just never been one to tease my audience.

That and cliffhangers... I loath them.

Anyway, that's this weeks update, huzzah!

Behold it is an update... and nothing else... still making slow progress... not even going to bother estimating finishing time.

well chapter 6 is finished and in Iruni's skilled hands, so now its just a waiting game as the Beta phase is gone through. I do hope he does work on his next chapter more though, it's only fair after he's helped me so much already.

Anyway I'm glad its out of the way. So just a bit longer people.

So to pass the time I figured I'd do something nifty. I'd post current party make ups and levels with some attacks mixed in based on stuff. Some Pokemon, like Nike for instance, won't be gone into, and also some names won't be given and some character's teams won't be fully gone into either, not yet. Also, levels can go above 100, I felt 100 was stupid as there are logical and realistic reasons for not having one in the first place (like Arceus for instance). If anyone here has ever played Disgea, you will understand. Don't worry though, I'll be sure to make sure everything is nice and balanced.

Clause Demillo. Age: 16.

Magnus - Magnemite: Lvl 17 (ch 5), Electric/Steel
-Metal Sound
-Tackle
-Thunder Shock
-Supersonic
-Sonic Boom
-Thunder Wave

Hex - Misdreavus: lvl 15
-Growl
-Psywave
-Spite
-Astonish
-Confuse Ray
-Return (TM)

Aztec - Bronzor: lvl 16
-Tackle
-Confusion
-Hypnosis
-Imprison
-Iron Defense


Dante Lockheart. Age: 18.

Aiya - Charmeleon: lvl 20
-Scratch
-Growl
-Ember
-Smoke Screen
-Dragon Rage
-Metal Claw

Buttercup - Butterfree: lvl 17
-Confusion
-Poison Powder
-Stun Spore
-Sleep Powder
-Gust

Tyranus - Nidoran (male): lvl 15
-Leer
-Peck
-Focus Energy
-Double Kick
-Poison Sting

Walter - Magikarp: lvl 12
-What do you think? (Splash)


Jennifer Rowan. Age: 19

Sun Wukong - Monferno: lvl 26
-Scratch
-Leer
-Ember
-Tuant
-Mach Punch
-Fury Swipes
-Flame Wheel
-Feint
??
??
??
??
??

And that's about it. Gym leaders and anyone else should be fairly obvious.

I'll update this little list as things come to light, should be fun.

Goddammit Jabbz, not this shit again.

If you and Slash came up with the idea seperatly, without informing each other of your ideas, then neither of you copied off anyone. I would make an analogy with Newton and some other guy who I forgot and calculus, but I don't know enough about it.

If people accuse you of copying off Slash then I will defend you. Slash isn't really worth copying, and whatever he does you can do better. I'm sure that if all other conditions were equal, and you and him were writing the same story with the same ideas then your version would be better and longer.

At this point all people can do is say that you extrapolated off a small passage and copied your own extrapolation. In that case the only person you copied would be yourself.

And for the love of god PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE don't stop writing SaP or SW. They are both awesome. Who cares if anyone copies? I certainly don't. As long as a story is done well then it could be Twilight in the Mario universe and I wouldn't give a shit as long as it was well written.

Here's a prime example: I don't normally read Halo fanfics because the idea of the stereotypical Halo kid picking up a pen/keyboard and writing a story is deeply disturbing. And yet I loved Ti Amo. Loved it.

As a final note, Jabbz, if you stop writing I will hunt you down and break your right wrist. I will also enlist help from the people here. I'm fairly sure that Raine/Gardevoir might want in on that.

>>2018
Iruni will probably be popping through to delete my posts of emo-ness at my behest. So I think forgetting about my stupidity at using this thread as a kind of diary will eventually pass over.

Sometimes I just don't know when to keep my mouth shut.

>>2019
Oh hell, I totally unloaded on one author in her dA journal once when it was totally uncalled for, I was more harsh than I should have been; so spouting emo-ness during a bad mood is more common than you would expect.

>>2018
>"I don't normally read Halo fanfics because the idea of the stereotypical Halo kid picking up a pen/keyboard and writing a story is deeply disturbing."

http://www.newgrounds.com/portal/view/549991

The above posts were deleted at Jabbz request.

It's Sunday, October 31st, and no, I'm not done yet, despite my earlier statement >>2022, but I've always been terrible at deadlines.

The main reason for the delay is that this chapter is long. 30 pages! That's 52 pages in novel format! Hopefully the quality and length will make up for me putting it off for about a week. This will be finished and given back to Jabbz for the final revisions and posting as soon as it's ready on my end, and no sooner. Pardon my tardiness, but no such ETA is available at the moment.

>>2035
You do realize that that is why I asked you to finish your chapter before editing mine? But NOOOOOO, you refused to listen to me. What are we gonna do when I finis chapter 7 dude?

Looks like I'm not a bitch after all. I've finished and it's in Jabbz's hands now.

>>2037
OH GOD... So much WORK!!

Through self esteem issues, random distractions, and a rabid moose, comes the almost two month piece of work called chapter 6! Read it, worship it, and see how awesome it is (possibly).

Chapter 6: New-found Ambition
> http://anime.adultfanfiction.net/story.php?no=600049220&chapter=6

R+R and all that good stuff. I'm very proud of this chapter, despite my episodes of deep depression (Maybe Edgar Allan Poe Jr. might have been more suitable as a pen name?... I'm kidding).

Enjoy peoples!

>>2043
I just wish that image had bright lavender skin or was more like the other one I posted. But oh well. I couldn't find anything that fit ALL of what was in this chapter... I need more Misdreavus stuff.

It's increasingly harder to write a review for a chapter you've had a hand in making, so my review will be a bit lacking.

This chapter had a great deal of character development, and it pulled it off very well. Galactic finding the Splash Plate was a nice addition, and it helps shown off their activity and inner workings. Dæmon popping up was neat too. I wonder what he was doing in Sandgem...

Meanwhile, I perused all 62 pages of misdreavus images on pixiv, and returned only 1 acceptable image. Would you expect there are more 'Rayquaza-colored-as-Mismagius' images than purple-skinned Gijinka of their species? I sure didn't.

>>2045
d'aaw.

Where to start?

> Hex and clause

I really like how they are so nervous and unsure about what it is they are exactly meant to be doing. Clause's innexperience and fear of what he might accidently do really shines through, giving the characters that little bit of extra dimension that I wouldn't have thought possible to add.

> Galactic

This kinda came outta nowhere for me, but I am really enjoying seein the inner workings of an organisation and the way they use HG as a front for who they really are. Cyrus has Aspergers Syndrome though, I swear. That or he is Dexter.

> Dante and other supporting characters

I REALLY love Dante. I'm not sure if it's because I can see alot of myself in his good natured laid back approach to everything, or whether it's how he interacts with his mate, but I really hope to see alot more on them in the future.

Maybe even a small story about how he came to have her, and their budding relationship?

Meredith is as usual the greatest mum ever. Threatening to kick Clauses arse if he hurts Hex isn't only funny, but makes her seem understanding and protective of those she loves. Another fantastic character.

> Random sour milk dude

I have no idea who this guy is, but it's obvious that shit is going to hit several fans when he makes a return to the story.

Basically I am excited to see where this is going, and am already impatiantly awaiting chapter 7. Gues I better take my mind off of it by working on chapter 2, lol.

> Final result

Top work as always, Jabberz. You are constantly setting the bar with each new chapter release, and have overtaken Sinners in brilliance, and that is saying something. Sinners was the pokemon fic that got me into the whole scene, and it's rare for a story to replace your love of the first.

You did well mate, top stuff. I'm proud of you.

>>2048
Super ego inflation by flattery... GO!!! I can now do anything... ANYTHING *Sees someone's writing he thinks is better*

...

*DEPRESSION*

Everyone on chan and on friends list's: Oh God damn it, here we go again...

>>2049
Again!? I keep running out of comforting dialogue to bring him back to normal!

>>2051
It was a joke you ninny!

>>2052

The above 5 or so posts are a good sample of the content of this thread.

>>2063
Quiet you!

Been reading through SaP myself and doing some minor cursory editing, changing a couple facts, nothing too major. When I stumbled upon this below.

Chapter 4: Clause gets a busted rib. Dante has a broken arm and several bandages.
Chapter 5+6 (2~4 days later): Gosh what ever happened to those injuries (which should last about a month to fully heal)?

... Needless to say I am now going to be delayed on Chapter 7 a bit, because now I have to go fix this somewhat major/minor continuity error. I love it when I get forgetful. What's even more amazing is that NO ONE HAS NOTICED IT THAT READ IT. Scary thought that. Oh well, to the editing mobile!

In other news, Chapter 7 is where some action finally happens. The title is Galactic Proportions, and if anyone knows my chapter naming system by know, that should be a decent hint. If not the picture for this post should help. Let the games begin.

Also, after Chapter 7 actually gets done, I'll be moving back to working on Silver Wings until its finished for reasons that will become apparent upon release of the author's not that will be in Chapter 5 of said story. Be prepared!

So, brief update. I've finished going through and doing all those silly edits that added in the effects of injuries to such things as conversations and physical interactions. About time. Thanks Iruni for perusing and highlighting.

I would appreciate some extra eyes telling me if I missed anything note worthy or messed up on my formatting for the umpteenth time.

Also... my turn to give public thanks to Iruni for pulling me out of a self created hitch. Don't want to mention what it was about.

Other than that... back to chapter 7... finally.

>>2125
Ooo ooo I know what it was! It was Jabbs' "I suck" syndrome flaring up again! Right? RIGHT?!

I'm right aren't I?

>>2127
No.

>>2127
http://objection.mrdictionary.net/go.php?n=4503128

>>2129
Daaamn that's harsh.

>>2136
I hold no favor to anyone I may defend or prosecute. It's not like they pay me, I'm just their bro on the interwebz.

>>2129
Hey, I wrote a story. Kinda. It just sucked so badly that I took it down shortly after I posted it.

No really. It was fucking terrible.

>>2138
Oh I know all about writing stories that I soon figured out needed to be deleted, my patriotic and religious conscience urging me in my sleep to purge them off the face of the Internetz (I'm not religious and neither am I nationalistic on top of that :O )

So chapter 7 is progressing, but today's progress was kind of thwarted due to the relevant picture beside this post. Needless to say, I try to use ideas and mechanics and inspiration from things I am a fan of. So just like how Head Hunters and their tech are gleaned from a certain game that starts with 'C,' the ancient past that I have been sort of hinting at will be inspired from a certain game that starts with a 'G.'

I guess you could say this is vague spoilers of what to expect, but I don't really care. I'm too jazzed by how awesome the game in my post picture is.

Don't expect references too soon though, unless I can stick one in now somehow. Other than that, good times ahead. My spirits are bolstered by this great game.

>>2172
Well, it's been... around 42 hours total to complete the game, and that's pretty much non stop playing since I got it on Tuesday. I have gone through the entire thing, beaten the Super boss called Dullahan (they made him harder than in Lost Age... WTF). I then had a blast killing the final boss... which was surprisingly difficult.

But now that I have completed the game, its time to get back to working on SaP and SW accordingly. Mind you the time spent not writing was totally worth it. It almost feels as if the game was too short despite spending almost a week playing it.

I will no doubt play through the game again, but not for awhile yet. I need to let my first run afterglow wear off. I played through Lost Age about 7 times, and the 7th was and is my last. At least for a long time.

My only qualm is that Dark Dawn ends in a cliff hanger. I pray that Camelot doesn't make me wait another 6~7 years before the next installment of the GS series.

Golden Sun stuff aside, Ch 7 looks to be shaping up pretty nicely and with an outline that's been sitting for the past... 4 days, I should be able to get the chapter done within about a week.

So that's all the news for now, and my one off topic rant about my activity as of the last few days. I'll cya all around, I'm sure.

So, Iruni got Chapter 7... good news: it's done. No not the Beta, but the chapter itself. Bad news: I still haven't actually gotten to my goal of Floaroma... Sorry Spog... it looks like SSS is going to be delayed... very delayed.

Why? Because I promised myself that after Chapter 7 I would switch gears to Silver Wings. I also plan on attempting to finish that story before continuing SaP. For my own reasons. No hints or spoilers from this author, I can tell you that right now.

Either way, expect chapter 7 at some point... no estimation as of yet. I'd rather Iruni get something done on his work over mine. Just because I'm awesome like that.

On a plus side, this means Spog will be forced to work on his other stuff... like Ti Amo... bwahahaha.

>>2193
I'd like to add that with it being my exam week, I might not have a chance to get at this until Thursday Night.

>>2195
's cool, I got to work on SW anyway. Take your time and catch a break after your finals. No need to run yourself ragged.

Buh... I really need to not slack off so much... Must be the winter doing this to me. Either way, expect it as soon as Jabbz gets it finalized. It's a great chapter, if I do say so myself. Probably my favorite so far.

Welp, here's to luck, and Iruni's perseverance, along with me trying to actually do work for once. Chapter 7: Nocturnal Serenade.

http://anime.adultfanfiction.net/story.php?no=600049220&chapter=7

As usual, Iruni gets props for his usual editing bonanza. The rest of you can read and hopefully leave some comments to either a. inflate my non-existent ego a bit, or b. just leave general comments and thoughts. Be sure to list errors you find, and so on.

Now I get to go nuts with Silver Wings. Yay!

Note: this chapter post's picture has a very, very, very small relevance factor.

Sigh... Here's my list of thanks to those who've been kind enough to chat me up with comments, or leave reviews.

Spog, Iruni, Espy, and Psyence. Thanks all, you were quite supportive. And thanks to the silent readers who skim my work whoever you may be.

>>2244
D'awwww, you're adorable.

Ok, here we are. Felt this chapter needed an actual response on here, and no Spog, screencaps from HalfLife: Full Life Consequences do not count.

Alright then, let's go, or as the French say, allons-y!

First off, I'll restate that this might be my favorite chapter of your reconstruction so far. The character interactions and the development went very well. As always, Hex has that cute, shy charm, and Dante always likes to put himself in the middle of things. Also, how can Dante expect Aiya to eat her vegetables? Doesn't he know that Grass isn't very effective on Fire types?

No one? Ok, bad joke, moving on...

Back on the Hex subject, I'm really liking how her character is starting to shape and form itself. It's vastly different from her initial incarnation, and I'm not even sure how far or how much more it'll change. But know this, it hasn't gone over-the-top yet, so don't worry about any of that. And, if you think you're going astray, you know I can help out if you need it.

It's nice to see that some of the stylistic suggestions I made in the beta-draft made it in. However, with me reading this final draft, I did spot a few errors I missed, which I can point out to you in your earliest convenience.

Hope you enjoy the pic, Pokemon and Doctor Who rarely coincide, so it's best to take the opportunities when they arise.

>>2257

Cannot unsee! D:

Oh god, it's even more clear here.

Well... SW is moving along again finally. I hit a rough patch when some life matters exploded in my face, but its all good now I think.

Lots of ideas and stuff floating around that I've been trying to pick through. Iruni's been putting up me bantering for a bit. I've been on a frenzy.

It's been difficult for me to not throw in the kitchen sink on SW and keep it as simple as its meant to be. Kitchen sinks are being saved for SaP... and even that is not a good place for them. Avoiding Slash or Skyler levels of EPIC are kind of my goal here.

People are the key. But look at me still bantering. That's this update done I think, oh wait, I forgot to say I have no idea when the next SW chapter will be out. Either way I'll keep working when I can and stuff.

Catch y'all later.

>>2273
Dude. Jabberwocky. Don't force your writing process. That's when everything will go to shit.

And on a related note...

Don't be bitch.

>>2286
A bit late on that last piece of advice there M.S.

>>2289
It was for future reference my friend.

Well, I know I haven't been updating much, and also I admit my progress has been really disappointing as of late. But though I don't have an excuse, I will soon because THIS Sunday is the first Sunday where I have to start helping my old high school with their annual spring play.

This has of course soured my mood considerably, because I was actually IN THE MOOD to write today, but no... I gotta go do volunteer work. It's kind of silly really, but even without the usual distractions I used to have, I seem to have slipped back into old haunts known as video games, flash games, and random youtube videos.

Not sure when I'll have this next chapter of SW done, as I have no deadline. Heh... I'm turning into Slash Firestorm with my update schedule here. That's probably not good, especially since I don't really have anything in my life interfering.

Let's see what I can do with this update now to turn it into something story related. Hmm... nothing really. Silver Wings has an estimated 6 or so chapters left in it, and God knows how many Sin and Punishment has left.

This chapter has my personal goal of being the last childhood sequence. After that I'll skip about 10 years to Chester's trainer years and thus the meat of the story.

Sin and Punishment... well there's a few goals I know I want to reach in sequence. I also need to introduce the Do... I mean Looker when the time comes.

SO... in the mean time, have an awesome link: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ws2EWqfjGBc

I will get SW done eventually. But Iruni can tell you I'm plagued by distractions. So don't be to expectant of anything. At this rate I'll update something by next year.

Slash Firestorm, eat your heart out.

>>2335

Who's Slash Firestorm?

>>2336
Never you mind.

Hiatus for six months before updating. Get on Slash's level.

>>2338
Got it in one. I already got 2 months under my belt, what's four more?

Seriously though, I am trying to update... but my attention keeps wandering elsewhere.

Well, I figured I'd say what was going on since it's been awhile. Chapter 5 was finished awhile ago and still has yet to be edited. But for those curious, it's titled Childhood's End. I started on Chapter 6 before I got 5 back and I think I'll be holding off on editing and publishing so I can spend more time writing.

This whole write, edit, publish pattern is kind of getting to me. So if you don't like the fact that I have a chapter hot and ready to publish... in a sense, and want to read it right now... tough.

Catch y'all later!

>>2369
It rather makes sense, especially if it reduces your stress. I don't get easily stressed about writing so much, so I'm pretty comfortable with the write, edit, publish pattern.

So I'm gonna have to agree with you doing a pattern most comfortable for you, since the last one was pissing you off so much.

>>2369
>2/1/11
>Posted on 3/1/11

Yes! He's a month out of sync with the rest of time!
Just as planned.

Stuff happened, and thus there was no more stuff to do. This isn't an update so much as incoherent rambling because I feel like it. Though if you want some form of news, Chapter 6 is coming to a rushed completion which I hope will be lengthened with Iruni's help when the time comes.

It's got all the main points I need so far, so that's good. After I finish this chapter I believe I'll start editing because... I need to have a good long brainstorm session to plan out exactly how and when the rest of SW takes place.

End of line.

And this stuff happens to be chapter 5 of SW for your reading pleasure. Thanks to Iruni and Spog as usual. Iruni for beta-ing and being bull headed at pushing me through dull moments to beat this one out, and spog for just being spog.

Chapter 5: Childhood's End

http://anime.adultfanfiction.net/story.php?no=600049482&chapter=5

Check this out! Chapter 6: Shift of Responsibility.

http://anime.adultfanfiction.net/story.php?no=600049482&chapter=6

Usual thanks to Iruni and all who reviewed and bothered to chat with me about what they thought. I appreciate it. Read and enjoy, as always.

>>2460
Random update-ish. Chapter 7 is kinda just sitting at a starting point, but it's started at least. That aside, I think it's almost time for another post that revolves around my story teams. The next post I put up will feature the battle moves of Chester's team, so anyone who hasn't yet read Chapter 6, get hustlin' cuz otherwise it gonna be full o' spoilers!

Catch you later.

>>2466
All data corresponds to Chester's team as of Chapter 6 of Silver Wings.
Name: Chester Isaac Sage
Age: 17
Birthday: April 19
Badges: 5

Pokemon Team: Name/Species/lvl/Ability/Held Item/Moves

Nami/Vaporeon/43/Water Absorb/None
Base: Aqua Ring, Aurora Beam, Bite, Quick Attack, Water Gun, Sand-Attack, Helping Hand
HM: Surf, Waterfall, Dive
Gimmick: Acid Armor (For now, she is only able to use it when there's water for her to merge with)
Egg: Yawn
TM: Dig, Rain Dance, Attract, Shadow Ball

Vulcan/Typhlosion/36/Blaze/Charcoal
Base: Flame Charge, Swift, Flame Wheel, Quick Attack, Smoke Screen, Leer
HM: Cut, Strength
Egg: Flare Blitz
TM: Fire Blast

Shena/Scyther/30/Technician/None
Base: Slash, Fury Cutter. Wing Attack, Agility, Focus Energy, Leer
Egg: Counter, Endure
TM: Rock Smash, X-Scissor

Jess/Steelix/33/Rock Head/None
Base: Sand Tomb, Slam, Sandstorm, Smack Down, Rock Tomb, Screech, Bind, Thunder Fang
HM: Rock Climb
Egg: Heavy Slam
TM: Dig, Rock Polish, Earthquake, Iron Tail

Laura/Gardevoir/34/Synchronize/None
Base: Calm Mind, Heal Pulse, Magical Leaf, Wish, Teleport, Double Team, Confusion, Healing Wish, Ice/Fire/Thunder Punch
Gimmick (high strength): Giga Impact, Return, Fling
Egg: Disable, Encore
TM: Shadow Ball, Thunderbolt

Chapter 7 ain't done jack diddly. Well that's a lie, it has, just not a lot. Though its better than nothing right?

To commemorate the event... I an shouting out that... SW has 4242 hits as of this moment... so not only is it the answer to life the universe and everything... but it does it TWICE OVER... Oh yeah!

Hoooo-ly shit!!

Well... Progress is dodgey at best... but... eh who am I kidding, progress keeps getting stalled because I'm getting distracted. I do have a goal of the 19th but at this rate I'm not going to make it.

I'll maybe have something after I emerge from being buried in Conduit 2 and Portal 2 for a month or so. Only 4 days till launch of those... 4 days to complete Ch 7... the race is on.

So, I've been looking around after hearing end of the world rumblings about May 21st. This is news to me, especially after being more inclined to look at the Mayans. Really in my mind the world isn't going to end when we predict it. However it is something interesting. If you wake up on Earth on May 22, it means you're in Hell... so if we're all living the same life we were, doesn't that mean that life as we know it, the daily grind and routine, does that mean that life as we know it is Hell?

That aside, people die every day. As far as I can see, the whole idea of calculating the end of the world was coined by the Mayan's first. The concept of the universe itself ending is also kind of silly. I think what's really terrifying though, especially after watching so much Doctor Who, is what exactly is believed to happen.

"Join with God" "Be at God's right hand" "Do God's will and polish his throne and tend to him"

Not exactly perfect quotations but isn't this slavery... or perhaps consumption by a large organism? I find that in the case of religion and wherever we got the ideas for it from; crazy hermits in the desert in the dark ages, how do they work? I find that the Doctor's quote "A footprint doesn't always look like a boot" quite apt.

So if you find yourself looking into the light on March 21, keep in mind it may be the light of some cosmic angler that'll eat your brain, or just eat you. Somehow I'm kind of thinking of that movie I didn't go see where all these ships shine a light on you and steal your brain. I forget the name. Either way, I think the world will be perfectly fine on the 22. But that's just me.

Who knows, maybe it's Vogons.

Or, you know, nothing could happen because it's being foretold by insane religious zealots.

If there was a god, then it wouldn't set an exact time in the future to destroy us. It wouldn't even bring an apocalypse, it would just wave it's hand over the earth and wipe the slate perfectly clean and start over. Maybe this time it wouldn't be fucking stupid enough to think to itself "gee, having mindless creatures worship me and do everything I say is awesome, but what if I give them curiosity and free will? I see everything so I know when I put the tree down and say 'oi, don't fucking touch it' that they will anyway, but I'm gonna do it anyway, for the lulz"

Flawed stupid dogmatic bullshit.

If I believed in god, this is what it would be like.

It wouldn't have a form, and it's voice would pleasure every nerve you have. Also because it knows all, it won't create a hell because nothing can be done that deserves pain for the rest of eternity. Fuck, even a mild headache for the rest of eternity is too extreme for someone like hitler.

End of days warnings come and go every like ten years. This shits no different AJD these fuckwits are trying to jump the gun saying it happens this year, and covering their arses by saying if you wake up and everything is the same then it's hell.

Hurr durr I wish I could legally kill people.

>>2536
I wish people didn't kill people at all but hey, humans be crazy mixed up animals. You also sound like Spog when he's mad at the world. So maybe you're long lost spirit brothers?

>>2536
>This shits no different AJD these fuckwits are trying to jump the gun saying it happens this year, and covering their arses by saying if you wake up and everything is the same then it's hell.

It'll be funny when the people that think they're going to heaven wake up here and spaz out.

>>2538


Actually no, it's brilliant. Because they wake up and think that god is displeased with them, so they give more of themselves and their money over to the church.

>>2539
Oh my god... it IS brilliant! It's all a conspiracy for the church! That... damn... Skrewd nailed it on the head I think. That is some dastardly monetary scheming right there.

>>2540

I'm not just a pretty face

Now if only we can make them drink the Kool-Aid.

Boredom, that is what this post is about. That and I'm using it to get my brain working. Since I won't be putting that much tech babble in my story or really explaining in great detail how things work because I'm not into that sort of thing, I decided to put down specs as to what certain things where and what they did. I will limit things that could be spoiler, but this is just imaginary fantasy sci-fi stuff. I'll do one entry for each thing whenever I feel like it. Think of them as mini projects that keep me up to snuff and interested in what I'm doing. So here's the first entry below.

Head Hunter: Field Agent
As seen in Chapter 4: Iron Steel, these agents are the more noticeable branch of the Head Hunter organization. The street slang usually refers to them as 'deuces' due to the fact that field agents work as a pair to maximize efficiency. They can cover each other and offer support when in a pair better than when alone.

Armor-suit: Hunters wear an advanced form of body armor that has a lot of mysterious properties. The plating is not what some would consider thick, but it has the protective strength to dampen damage received from incoming fire from most small arms as well as some medium assault weapons. The armor is powered to a minor extent, these aren't supermen. The armor is full body, covering the chest, arms, hands, and legs. The lower half can be hidden by clothing worn over the legs.

The suit can absorb/block energy damage to a degree, making the suit able to take some small punishment from Pokemon related attacks. It may be small protection, but it can mean the difference between life and death.

The suit has odd properties and abilities to heal and mend wounds to the user if the plating is penetrated. It's not fast, and it isn't going to make that big of a difference when hit in the head or if limbs get broken, but gashes, cuts, scrapes, burns, all of them will be mended over time as long as the suit as power. This makes Hunters key mobile assets to be deployed and used in only the utmost need. Assignments usually entail extremely dangerous criminals that have strong Pokemon that are attacking civilians and law enforcement.

Visor/Glasses: The visor is hooked up directly to the suit and has a HUD for the agent to utilize, which shows readings based on vitals, location, and estimation of power levels when able to scan Pokemon. Can tell time too :D.

Weaknesses: Human error, things like that. The suits systems can be overloaded by excess damage, thankfully the plating doesn't need power to block solid projectiles. Armor piercing rounds shred it like tissue paper. The sensors can be jammed. It's still somewhat experimental, but most of the kinks have been worked out. Some side-effects (reason unknown) of wearing the armor for too long can be muscle spasms, dizziness, and illness. The cause of these is yet to be determined, it's most likely whatever power source was found for powering the suit.

Power source: Can be found within an easily accessible plate of the chest section. It's a very unique substance which gives off a golden light, has the properties of metal, but seems to also have the ability to shift its physical state. It has been known to become intangible when introduced to electric current. When it's in this state it gives off a greater amount of energy than put in. No one has been able to explain how this is thus far. The metal can produce enough energy to keep itself running when integrated into the housing of the armor, though it still needs ignition from an outside source.

The power cell can run foe an unusually long time for its size. The longest recorded functioning of these cells was one whole week. Unfortunately due to the rarity of the mysterious ore, it is not eligible for use in the common world. It's discovery and application however, have been deemed classified and thus kept from the public and global eye.

That ends my rant on HUnter armor and functionality. I love my mysterious and dubious power sources that scream 'unnatural.' What's the world without a little magic and silliness eye?

Holy fuck the suits are powered by fusion energy.

Have it so that if the magnetic field holding the core in place is damaged, it collapses in on itself, no longer able to sustain it's stable properties and creates a point of infinite gravity that draws everything into itself within 100 meters, before exploding horribly and destroying everything within a kilometer

>>2548
Seems hazardous to implant such a powersource in a suit that is meant for military combat and has a high probability to be damaged. If a soldier gets downed, his entire platoon could be wiped out because of it.

I think Skrewd just wants things to be obscenely powerful and dangerous. just so there can be dramatic explosions.

I have had an FA account for some time. I finally uploaded more than my fics... http://www.furaffinity.net/user/delosdemillo/

Go look and see the picture and know it is MINE... all MINE... I post this here because I has friends and friends means they can help me get after picture thieves!

I am done here.

So I closed my tab with my AFF account in it because it kept randomly redirecting my to a page about twitter and making an account. Then because I don't have my account bookmarked and because I didn't think to type the URL for the site into my URL bar, I googled it. I then saw every link to AFF marked with a warning about how visiting the site may result in harming my computer. Apparently according to the google diagnostic the site has been tackled and CAN give out malware, and this is within the last two days.

Now, I'm one that usually and most often heeds these warnings, so I might not be updtating my next chapter on AFF one I finish because I literally CAN'T risk breaking my laptop in any way. It's the only one I have and my folks and I can't afford a new one any time soon, if ever.

So I guess check my FA account for updates in future as that site has no warnings. Neither does fanfiction.net so I might end up resorting to moving everything back to there (after 3 years of not using it.)

As for a progress report, I leave you with the oh so helpful words of Gold Leader, "Stay on target."

>>2581
Seems that whatever went down with AFF was dealt with as google doesn't warn about the site any more. So that's a plus for whoever here publishes somewhat regularly. So that means I'll be able to update there unless it gets borked again.

http://anime.adultfanfiction.net/story.php?no=600049482&chapter=7

wa-bam!

Definitely a fun read, Jabbz.
I love Shena's persona.

Trying to figure out how the whole issue with Umiko and Chester is going to be introduced in S&P. I'm looking forward the to interaction. :)

Well, I know it's been awhile since I updated but I figured I'd take the opportunity to say that I've decided to take a break from writing. Just a hiatus to get my head back in the game so to speak. I'm not killing my stories, or anything like that. That would be dumb.

I'll be sure to post something, be it news or something random that I feel would have something to do with my stories. Maybe a question to the public about what they think so far, even though I don't update that frequently.

Anyway, that's about all I have to say for now. Stay tuned I guess.

I really can't say when my writing will be started up again for those who've probably been either waiting with baited breath, or those who gave up awhile ago and moved on. Truth is I really haven't wanted to and I really could care less. I like that I drew in a very small audience on all the places I posted, but really this is a personal issue. I can't ever seem to stick with something and see it through. I've been living with story ideas and plots in my head for a good 4 years now and knowing everything like the ins and outs of a tale makes it so that writing it becomes boring and predictable. The spark of adventure has gone out of my stories so I just end up stopping. For readers who don't know what's going to happen, I know you are left wondering, and I know how cruel that is... but really I just can't bring myself to sit down and write anything substantial. Even Chapter 8 of one of my older works is only up to 5 pages and hasn't budged from that in several weeks. At this point I just... I just want to let it sit and wait... and maybe I'll get back into it at some point... who knows.

>>2682
And by "older works" I mean Sin and Punishment

>>2683
i'll be watching and waiting if you do decide to continue updating silver wings, it's one of my top 5 favourite stories. best of luck with everything anyways.

Welcome to another round of random techno babble. I'm doing this, like I said so long ago in the Hunter armor section, to try and keep me thinking. I have a little project I'm working on but I don't want to go into any details because as of late I haven't had anything to show but empty words. However who knows, this may be fun for some to read.

The weapon displayed in this post is experimental plasma riffle used in Iron Steel. Still under development and full of kinks, the event's of chapter 3 are rumored to be one of its field tests. Later versions of the weapon will be more effective, and more efficient. The weapon was designed with POKéMON in mind as the target, since many hostile trainers could have species that are resistant or completely immune to ballistics weapons.

It fires a concentrated 'bullet' of energy, or plasma, which will heat or melt through metallic armors. Also, due to it's energy signature and behavior, the weapon is effective against incorporeal targets such as ghost types.

The weapon has three modes of fire: fully automatic, single shot, and a type of energy bola. The tertiary fire ability takes a while to warm up as it uses more energy from the power cell that makes up the weapon's ammunition. When fired, a plasma blast of several bolts is expelled. They spread out, but when the central bolt hits an object, the other bolts will converge on that target as well. This ability is difficult to aim, and produces a small plasma explosion due to the converging of all the fired bolts. Deadly to the weapon's operator if used in close quarters with the target.

Since the manufacturing of this riffle is costly, they only see use when the situation requires it. There are more energy based experimental weapons, however I haven't revealed them in story, so I won't go into them. Hope this was interesting to read to those interested in silly techie things. Feel free to offer your thoughts.

>>2709

I see you used the KRISS Super V as the model for the plasma rifle. I'm going to use that as the basis for my analysis. Was that a purely aesthetic choice? Because as I understand it the Super V derives its unusual shape from the internal mechanisms designed to cut down on recoil, which doesn't seem very useful for directed energy weapons. Does the act of firing plasma create recoil sufficient to justify the expense of the Super V's internal mechanisms?

Also the placement of the grip...it leaves your hand awfully close to the end of the barrel. The end where the superheated plasma comes out.

The automatic fire function doesn't seem like it would be very efficient, if the weapon and its ammunition are so expensive. Nor does the energy bola firing function. It would probably look cool, but three well placed semi-automatic shots could do the same amount of damage with substantially less risk to the user.

Now for my questions. What material is ionized to create the plasma bolt? Roughly how much does it cost to manufacture? How much training would the average user need to become proficient with it? What can this gun do that a strong, well-trained POKéMON can't that justifies its expense?

>>2710
Hahaha, the Kriss super V is the base design, and the thing is you aren't the first person to catch on to that. Raine also picked on that and I just laughed. In truth the weapons and technology the Hunter's used is not original by design. Everything that's technologically advanced is actually a reference to a game I dearly love. And yes the design and and use doesn't make much realistic sense when using directed energy weapons but hey... can't be a reference if you take too many liberties lol. Here's a link you can look at with the weapon's true origin and name http://conduit.wikia.com/wiki/Deatomizer_Mk4 .

And I bet most people will look at that spoiler, and thus blow my careful attempts to hide the reference from those who don't know the game. That's how I wanted it really, a secret reference.

Anyways, in answer to your more technological questions: I have never really been all that good at science fictional realism. Which is why I tend to follow shows like Doctor Who, Firefly, and movies Star Wars when they aren't stupid like the first three (chronologically speaking) movies.

Guess you could call it science fantasy. Anyway, from what I do know about energy based weapons, and that's vague... most need a type of gas and a type of metal... Energy weapons use batteries as ammunition. Power packs, power cells, things like that. If you know more about it feel free to add to my descriptions. After all I won't be putting this stuff into the main story as I'm only focusing on the events and the characters, not the tools or how they work. For instance if Clause ever had to pick up this riffle, he'd not be interested in the fine mechanics... just how to point, shoot, and defend himself with it.

As for what it can do that a POKéMON can't... well nothing really, but the thing is a lot of writers fail to take into account that people on the south end of good on the moral compass will not just play by the rules. They'll try to attack the opposing trainer directly which means that trainer or Hunter in this case needs a means to defend and attack for himself. and that becomes almost impossible when fighting with just ballistics weapons against ghost, psychic, rock, and steel types. This Riffle is answer to that and provides the human with an edge against those types.

Also, battles use skill and strength on the whole, but as Roark said in Rock Solid, luck is a key factor. Say hunter looses his water, fire, or ground type thus loosing his advantage against a user of the risky types I mentioned above... what's he going to do? The suit provides protection and he can run away... but he needs a way to defend himself and while there are rocket launchers and armor piercing rounds... those are still just annoyances or slightly effective to heavily armored targets like Steelix, and pointless to use on ghosts. Psychics can just divert the pathing of solid projectiles or block out a lot of the damage with a barrier.

Energy weopons would count as a humans version of a Special Attack, and one of a different attribute which could affect and hurt things a lot more than a tungsten shell or something else of that nature.

>>2711
lousy spoiler is lousy... showing the link anyway... :V

>>2712
Tripple post, forgot to answer the training thingy. Well how much does it take to train with a normal weapon? I'd say this would take the same amount of time wouldn't it? It's just a firearm that has different materials. As for pricing... I was never good at that kind of thing. I'd say that this riffle would be maybe... oh... what's a good number... 20%? Yeah, 20% more costly to produce than say... your average ballistics assault riffle. Like say a SCAR or something... *shrugs*

Most of the materials and such are mined from Mt Coronet anyway. It's always been known for it's odd metal content and strange magnetic fields. I'm guessing a lot of other mountains would have the materials needed. Hell, Chargestone Cave in Unova is probably an extremely rich deposit of such materials and Sinnoh could have trade agreements for materials for these weapons. Would make sense wouldn't it?

So it's pretty much running off this?

http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/RuleOfCool

That's fine if it is, but for those of us who dig a bit deeper it might not have the same resonance. I use the Rule of Cool too; the Pegasus psychological warfare striders make no sense from an engineering standpoint, and their function would be better served by a wheeled or treaded vehicle, but legs look cooler, and that's why I designed them that way.

>>2714
yup, indeed it is... and battle striders are indeed quite cool. Pic related.

Hope my use of this trope (never knew it was a trope till now, I just really like the game and the tech in it because I think it's cool), and I hope the not so deep mechanics of it don't bother you xD.

>>2716

It doesn't bother me. If I was looking for realism I wouldn't be reading stories about POKéMON. I have invoked the rule several times.

Armor piercing rounds can drill through a tank.

I don't care how big a steelix is, armor piercing rounds are going to ruin its day.

And since ghosts are energy...

I'd assume any sort of dissipation would work on them.

Although the more you think about it, the more like electric types ghost types become.

Raw energy with sentience oh god it's achieved evelutionary perfection praise arceus!

>>2724
Steelix, maybe. But what about things with no organs like Bronzong or Syglyph. Thing bout steelix is that it's armor is quite possibly thicker than a tanks, and also quite possibly harder. Seeing as it spends a lot of it's time in high heat/high pressure environments. A diamond tipped armor penatrator would be nasty, but not very cost effective seeing how many steelix there are in the world compared to diamonds.